It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.
agree- influenced by the social groups as we get older and older
disagree- innate characteristics do not change
disagree- some do not have social groups
Some may say that we are defined by the social group that we are a member of. However, the following essay will argue that it is plausible to disagree with the author's statement.
Admittedly, we spend substantial time during our day outside of home as we get older and older. Going on from high school to college, there are few students who commute and most students do not and live on campus. After college, when he or she gets an occupation, they live near their company. As can be seen from our daily lives, we can easily acknowledge the fact that we spend less time in home, with family and more time with the groups of people that you are a member of in our society, such as friends in school or co-workers at work. Therefore, it could be said that we define ourselves as a member of a certain social group that you join.
However, although we spend our time more outside, our innate characteristics that we are born with does not change. If a person is innately shy, she could pretend to be outgoing in front of people and act as if one is surely a member of the group. However, when asked privately away from other's attention, one would answer that he or she is a shy person. We live near the innate traits that we are born with and behave the periphery of it when we become a member of a social group, not deviating far away from the traits that we are born with.
In addition, there could be people who do not have a sincere social group. A social group, which is defined as a group of people that people selectively meet for a certain purpose in this essay, cannot be formed if one does not advertently seek for a group to join or just stay inside home. There are people who do not wish to join a group and rather stay comfortable in their own private area, at home. Or, although one is a member, since he or she does not have affinity towards it, that person would not define themselves as a member of a group that one does not wish to belong to. He or she will be defining oneself as a person that they really behave when one is alone.
Therefore, I believe that one is not primarily defined as a member of a social group. Our innate traits are always with us for the rest of outlives and one could pretend to not follow the innate traits and act the periphery of the traits in order to behave naturally. However, one would not define hisself or herself as the way they are seen in the group. In addition, it depends on whether he or she wishes to stay and belong to a social group or not.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Our innate traits are always with us for the rest of outlives and one could pretend to not follow the innate traits and act the periphery of the traits in order to behave naturally.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a negator
Suggestion: Refer to to and not
Sentence: A social group, which is defined as a group of people that people selectively meet for a certain purpose in this essay, cannot be formed if one does not advertently seek for a group to join or just stay inside home.
Error: advertently Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, one would not define hisself or herself as the way they are seen in the group.
Error: hisself Suggestion: himself
flaws:
It is a little bit off the topic.
You said: 'some do not have social groups', but still it belongs to a social group which is alone.
suggested:
As is so often pointed out, human society is a mass of concrete individuals who shares some characteristics with the others and also possess its unique features as well. For one single person, the groups that he attend can only represent several aspects of the overall characteristics, however, it is unwarranted and ridiculous to expand this broad assertion to embrace all the characteristics and to be used to define a person, while neglecting some of the unique personality.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2103 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.189 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.252 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.826 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.672 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.22 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Agree
agree- influenced by the social groups as we ...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'saith', 'says'.
Suggestion: saith; says
...e do not have social groups Some may say that we are defined by the social group...
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Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...at it is plausible to disagree with the authors statement. Admittedly, we spend sub...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'in addition', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.167883211679 0.240241500013 70% => OK
Verbs: 0.175182481752 0.157235817809 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0602189781022 0.0880659088768 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0729927007299 0.0497285424764 147% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0912408759124 0.0444667217837 205% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.149635036496 0.12292977631 122% => OK
Participles: 0.0273722627737 0.0406280797675 67% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.33516185843 2.79330140395 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0200729927007 0.030933414821 65% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0766423357664 0.0997080785238 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0237226277372 0.0249443105267 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0200729927007 0.0148568991511 135% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2676.0 2732.02544248 98% => OK
No of words: 502.0 452.878318584 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33067729084 6.0361032391 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.294820717131 0.366273622748 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.145418326693 0.280924506359 52% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0956175298805 0.200843997647 48% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0577689243028 0.132149295362 44% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.33516185843 2.79330140395 84% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 219.290929204 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.384462151394 0.48968727796 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.489860786 55.4138127331 78% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.1 23.380412469 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5578892415 59.4972553346 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.8 141.124799967 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 23.380412469 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.674092028746 59% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.94800884956 162% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 39.6418326693 51.4728631049 77% => OK
Elegance: 1.01612903226 1.64882698954 62% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257421956191 0.391690518653 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126004028015 0.123202303941 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0787061969371 0.077325440228 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.580749342951 0.547984918172 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.212795012903 0.149214159877 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10344258263 0.161403998019 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814696353121 0.0892212321368 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.272132384352 0.385218514788 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.156514833689 0.0692045440612 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144556271349 0.275328986314 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774579683654 0.0653680567796 118% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.4325221239 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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