The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Today, flsuh of luxuries - gamut from good food,theaters, hotels and bars to disco- and convieniences- internet, public transport system and good health care- are readily available to the people. Though there are some individuals who indulge in luxuries excessively, most people use luxury occasionally as medium of re-vitalizing mind and better focus on their work which ultimately, contributes to the success.
Luxuries and convinience are used for constructuve purposes for the most people to keep themselves happy. For instance, A Graduate student who spends majority of his/her time working in the lab would want break from the work in order to restore the work life balance. Some may prefer watching movies using internet services like the Netflix, a few would like to go for watching a movie in theatre and still other may want to just go out and eat a good food at their favourite restaurant. All these activities serve a purpose of refreshing the mind. When an individuals feel he/she has ready access to the luxuries and conviniences in the life, they feel more secure and thus, tend to focus on more important things like work. Thus,availibilty of luxuries and conviniences allows individual to be persistent and focused on their work. This ,in turn, leads to individual becoming more genteel and creative. For instance, Bill Gates can have anything he wants to have in life because he is wealthiest person on the earth and can live a decadent life. But, despite having access to all the luxury in the world he focuses more on the development of his company, Microsoft, and does philanthropic work. This indicates that luxury and convinieces transform individual into a maverick person who can lead his life in the best possible way.
Availabilty of conviniences like the internet allows individual to acquire new set of skills needed to accomplish a task.For example, there are online education platform like the Edx and coursera that allows any one to acquire new set of skill without much struggle. Internet has made the lives of people much easier than it could ever have been. Convienieces like internet serves as medium to disseminate information and leads to waxing of knowledge and information. This information is used by many individuals constructively for the betterment of their lives and thus, make a progress.
However, luxuries and convinience does not always build a strong individual. There are some people who excessively use the luxury and convienieces to lead a decadent and desultory life. For instance, some individual may spend his whole day playing online game. A few may belive in the party culture and such individual can be found always partying. But this constitutes only small portion of population and majority used luxury and conviniences for constructive purpose to improve their life.
In conclusion, availability of luxury and conviniences make the individual a better person because they serve as transitory distraction from work and thus, allowsm a person to better focus on the work and acquire new set of skill at unprecedented scale.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , theaters
...flsuh of luxuries - gamut from good food,theaters, hotels and bars to disco- and convieni...
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Line 2, column 554, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
... a purpose of refreshing the mind. When an individuals feel he/she has ready access to the lux...
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Line 2, column 730, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , availibilty
...on more important things like work. Thus,availibilty of luxuries and conviniences allows ind...
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Line 2, column 838, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rsistent and focused on their work. This ,in turn, leads to individual becoming mo...
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Line 2, column 983, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hing he wants to have in life because he is wealthiest person on the earth and ca...
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Line 2, column 985, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the wealthiest'.
Suggestion: is the wealthiest
...ng he wants to have in life because he is wealthiest person on the earth and can live a deca...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...t of skills needed to accomplish a task.For example, there are online education pla...
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Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'platforms'?
Suggestion: platforms
...For example, there are online education platform like the Edx and coursera that allows a...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...m like the Edx and coursera that allows any one to acquire new set of skill without muc...
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Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...betterment of their lives and thus, make a progress. However, luxuries and convi...
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Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...tterment of their lives and thus, make a progress. However, luxuries and convinience doe...
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Line 4, column 263, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little may'.
Suggestion: little may
...nd his whole day playing online game. A few may belive in the party culture and such in...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from work and thus, allowsm a person to better focus on the work and acquire new...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 501.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16966067864 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94463819726 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493013972056 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 832.5 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7686492293 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.727272727 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7727272727 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.090758174699 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317890004841 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029700910372 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0565206024403 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314823022069 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.