The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning f

Essay topics:

The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

How a person gets develop his strength and resourcefulness is contingent on the environment in which he is born and raised. Thus, harder the environment for life, more the strength of a person. Consequently, if same person is treated with excessive indulgence during his rearing, his abilities would have not been matured or fully developed. The issue of hardships and luxuries is important in a society because the reason for some people being strong while others being weak is rest on the conditions he has lived through. While, there is no reservation that hardships often provides the conducive environment for someone to develop his strengths, there is a reason to believe that in fields like sports where the talents and skills of a sportsman are independent of the environment he was born into, for reaching to the pinnacle, he has to work diligently without being tired out, that is, he has to go through hardships.

However true it may be the case that some fields do not get influenced by the luxuries or convenience provided to someone in life, the field of theatre, drama and acting are such where inherent talents remain subdued because of the lack of fatigue and sufferings in life. The life style of famous actors is such that their offspring get accustomed to abundant wealth and stardom and often resisting advice and suggestion to improve. And even during the time when these children attend schools for arts and theatre, their reckless attitude prevent them from learning the nuances of drama. For example, the life of Mr. Abhishek during 1985 to 2006 was full of money, lavishness and innumerable sycophants that he was sure of his success in Bollywood as of his father, who is Mr. Amitabh. He flunked the schools and dismiss all lessons and suggestions given to him for a career in acting. The result was not surprising that all of his movies were not successful since he was lacking in on stage drama and even critics written that he is not the 20 per cent of his father. Finally, he had to quit his acting career. Therefore, the excessive indulgence given during the learning phase of a child prevents a child from honing his talents.

One argument that supports the idea that luxuries do not influence the development of a strong individual is that fields like politics where voters scorn at luxuries provided to a child of a politician, has to train himself by going through mandatory hardships in order to step into his father shoes. The life of a political leader is such that he provides all possible luxuries to his offspring in terms of private access to expensive clubs, admission to a top college, exemption from general rules and personal security. However, the voters sneer at such extravagance provided to a child, thus, starts loathing the child from his early age. For example, the life of Rahul Gandhi, who is the son of former Prime Minister of India and whose previous three generations have ruled India for more than 7 decades, had to suffer the hardships of tiring election campaigning and incessant critical argument for being born in super rich family. For the period 2014 to 2019, he had to live his life by sacrificing all comforts of life in order to win hearts of the voters to show that he is compassionate and ready to serve them. Despite all these, he suffered the loss in elections. Therefore, the field of politics is such where luxuries and convenience push the boundaries of a political aspirant to prove himself.

Another reason that buttresses the thought of luxuries encourages someone to work even harder in order to make up to the luxuries or to prove that he is worthy. The field of cricket is such where all luxuries provided during the early stage of life often urge the child to be mettlesome and overcome the expectations of general public since public by inherent nature often assumes that child of a famous and skilled cricketer will even be better than his predecessor, thus luxuries put the child under extreme pressure to live up to their expectations. For example, the child of Mr. Tendulkar, who is recognised as God of Cricket, was provided all forms of luxury such as cricket coaches were hired from abroad to train him and buying a large place simulating the cricket ground for practice and the use of expensive computer technology to spar batting shots. However, the expectations of public were insurmountable that his score of 100 in his first match was not applauded by them and in the same match, his 3 catches were not noticeable since public was expecting him to score at least 200 in order to serve the name of his father. Thus, luxuries given to a child of famous sportsman often proved baneful and put him under unnecessary burden to perform.

While concluding, as it be seen from the above paragraphs that although luxuries prevents the child of famous actor from developing his skills and talents and be strong, the same luxuries often push the boundaries of a child of famous sportsman and politician where career does depend on the reputation of the father of a child. Therefore, the field, the person wishes to join for his career decides if luxuries would prevent him or push him for development of an individual entity.

Votes
Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 321, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...lesome and overcome the expectations of general public since public by inherent nature often a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, at least, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.5258426966 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 30.0 11.3162921348 265% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 33.0505617978 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 146.0 58.6224719101 249% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4337.0 2235.4752809 194% => OK
No of words: 897.0 442.535393258 203% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83500557414 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.47265550384 4.55969084622 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64909029567 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 378.0 215.323595506 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421404682274 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1341.0 704.065955056 190% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 16.0 4.99550561798 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.563709098 60.3974514979 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.62962963 118.986275619 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2222222222 23.4991977007 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37037037037 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112750384842 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380045827062 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281476624369 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078267972008 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224573019034 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 184.0 100.480337079 183% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Write the essay in 30 minutes.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.