Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
I disagree that shorter spans have created a environmemnt where people ability to choose from a plethora of options has improved. This can be argued on several grounds.
The first sentence itself points out the downside of mass media and internet. The short attention spans is detrimental to the ability of people especially the adolscent age group to understand and assimilate the deluge of information. Information has meaning only when it is processed and applied to our daily routine. The cupidity and eagerness with which we jump from one topic to another will not lead to grasping of the subject matter in hand. For example reading sports require less attention span compared to reading economics section as students(except those who have economics background) may not be conversant with the jargons of economics.
The second important downside is the difficulty of spawning new ideas with such short attention spans. Focus and intelligence are the primary requirements to generate new ideas. A mind bogged with only information cannot meditate on the subject with laser sharped focus. This argument can be challenged because several innovative ideas are coming from the present generation which also occupies the major chunk of the popualation who uses internet.
The second sentence argues that with increasing choices the ability to decide increases. However one cannot deny that increasing options also engenders a feeling of dissatisfaction in the consumer about the choices. The deluge of options confuses the consumer even when the selection may be about a trivial object. The market is flooded with various ranges of soaps, considering if one makes an informed decision it may take a inordinate time and leads to dissatisfaction even after the choice is decided.
Though one cannot dismiss the fact that an informed citizen is better than an ignorant individual. So the quality of decison making has significantly improved. Also the healthy competion between the retail owners and online market ensures that the market is fair and the consumer is not denied the ability to make choices on his own.
To conclude one can say internet is indeed a blessing for people who decide based on their judgement. But it is similar to various trappings of life when it is exessively used.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248730964467 0.240241500013 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.182741116751 0.157235817809 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0939086294416 0.0880659088768 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0431472081218 0.0497285424764 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0253807106599 0.0444667217837 57% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116751269036 0.12292977631 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0558375634518 0.0406280797675 137% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78716797706 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0329949238579 0.030933414821 107% => OK
Particles: 0.00253807106599 0.0016655270985 152% => OK
Determiners: 0.116751269036 0.0997080785238 117% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0253807106599 0.0249443105267 102% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0228426395939 0.0148568991511 154% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2298.0 2732.02544248 84% => OK
No of words: 370.0 452.878318584 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.21081081081 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424324324324 0.366273622748 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.321621621622 0.280924506359 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205405405405 0.200843997647 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127027027027 0.132149295362 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78716797706 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 219.290929204 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556756756757 0.48968727796 114% => OK
Word variations: 62.6231942161 55.4138127331 113% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5 23.380412469 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1432610939 59.4972553346 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.9 141.124799967 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.380412469 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.45 0.674092028746 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.21349557522 77% => OK
Readability: 50.6621621622 51.4728631049 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.67676767677 1.64882698954 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37910583433 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104859442717 0.123202303941 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0784366789681 0.077325440228 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.574897413205 0.547984918172 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123713825074 0.149214159877 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144347699833 0.161403998019 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577231911283 0.0892212321368 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.315731096633 0.385218514788 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.159288228949 0.0692045440612 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225365018412 0.275328986314 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537077638712 0.0653680567796 82% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.