Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
I strongly oppose the claim that young people should place more emphasis on picking worthy goals and not what they dream about. This is because society cannot decide what constitutes as "worthy". For example a housewife's job may not be worthy in the eyes of a working mom. A soldier can disparage the work of a businessman because of his selfless devotion for the country. A doctor can belittle the work of an actor. The point is every individual has a role in society. The worthiness of any profession is difficult to determine due to its inherent subjectivity. The reason is even more preposterous as human beings are inherently selfish. Even philanthropy, an act that seems so selfless, can be called selfish as people feel good about themselves or in some cases project a good self to the public. Every person has the right to decide and perform what he/she thinks is worthy and not because some one thinks the person was selfish. Let us try to understand, what if a person pursues goals that seem worthy in the eyes of the society but not for the person himself. He may find it frustrating and may have to live a life in regret and animosity against the people who forced him in the first place. His self may never accept the worth of his job notwithstanding the importance perceived by the society. He may even be abysmal in the job itself. I believe people who reform the society are not the ones who pursue their dreams dictated by others rather they follow their heart. What if Steve Jobs questioned his decision to dropout based on the worthiness of his goal. Was he not selfish? Indeed he was but he revolutionized the computer industry by his selfishness. Was his achievement not worthy ? I think few could argue on that.
To conclude, young people must pursue their own goals and decide the worthiness of such goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Indeed,
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'i think', 'in some cases', 'in the first place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207865168539 0.240241500013 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.162921348315 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0842696629213 0.0880659088768 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0533707865169 0.0497285424764 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0758426966292 0.0444667217837 171% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.101123595506 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0168539325843 0.0406280797675 41% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.74175083353 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0224719101124 0.030933414821 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.11797752809 0.0997080785238 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0337078651685 0.0249443105267 135% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0280898876404 0.0148568991511 189% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1840.0 2732.02544248 67% => OK
No of words: 325.0 452.878318584 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66153846154 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.58838876751 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335384615385 0.366273622748 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.203076923077 0.280924506359 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.141538461538 0.200843997647 70% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0892307692308 0.132149295362 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74175083353 2.79330140395 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 219.290929204 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532307692308 0.48968727796 109% => OK
Word variations: 55.8965319903 55.4138127331 101% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.4761904762 23.380412469 66% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.976881339 59.4972553346 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.619047619 141.124799967 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4761904762 23.380412469 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.428571428571 0.674092028746 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.94800884956 40% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 35.7838827839 51.4728631049 70% => OK
Elegance: 1.11538461538 1.64882698954 68% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264031745979 0.391690518653 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109390716358 0.123202303941 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.101486636439 0.077325440228 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.389961017065 0.547984918172 71% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179693918486 0.149214159877 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868869445467 0.161403998019 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619434104081 0.0892212321368 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.284280334387 0.385218514788 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0 0.0692045440612 0% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203469928886 0.275328986314 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502047729112 0.0653680567796 77% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.30420353982 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.66592920354 218% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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