Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
The 21st century humans are moving towards a remarkable progress in the field of science and technology. With the advent of internet, especially the social networking sites like Facebook and Twitter, information gets passed on in the same way as a fire spreads across a forest. people are always busy in creating, sending and forwarding messages in Whatsapp which has become a basic tool for knowledge sharing having its own boon and bane.
In the olden days, the different modes of communication was very less whereas nowadays, one can witness a plethora of it. For instance, animals were relied on for transport like horses, camels and bullocks which took away the time of the people. On the other hand, to reach a destination quickly, one could use a train, ship or a flight for a comfortable and less time-consuming journey. Also, academicians, researchers and mostly scientists and mathematicians, in olden era, used to write letters to their counterparts to clarify doubts and to share their findings. however, the scenario today is completely different. At the click of a button, emails are sent across which enhances the speeding up of processes. nevertheless, it has paved way for more publications, discoveries and filing the patents. More and more innovations result owing to this reason. The best examples could be that of internet banking, ticket booking, online shopping and what not. The list just goes on and on. Waiting in queues for getting things done has become a thing of the past which nobody would even want to think. who does not like sitting at home and ordering food, paying bills and make bank transactions?
Nevertheless, all the above has only led to a proliferation of information rendered and not the vice versa. it is true that media and internet have caused people's attention span to get shorter which is clear in teenagers. While the parents recommend them to learn, they are always found glued to their mobile phones. As a result of it, attention deficit syndrome is noticed in kids at a very young age. Children are addicted towards television, video games, cartoon and movies that tend to distract them a lot. Moreover, it has led to a transition from a bookworm to a maverick who thinks independently and has insight to the outside world. he is capable of thinking out of the box and come up with new ideas which in turn could lead to the development of himself and the nation.
Thus, it could be concluded that even though technology has led to attention deficit among the kids of today, they are more likely to gain knowledge through the mass media and internet. however, parents and educational institutions must make the students to focus more on academics and not unnecessarily wasting time in irrelevant subjects that creep up in the social sites. The path towards advancement is in the hands of an individual and he should decide to use the mass media and internet in an advantageous manner.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'remarkable progress'.
Suggestion: remarkable progress
... 21st century humans are moving towards a remarkable progress in the field of science and technology....
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Suggestion: People
... way as a fire spreads across a forest. people are always busy in creating, sending an...
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Suggestion: However
...ify doubts and to share their findings. however, the scenario today is completely diffe...
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Suggestion: Nevertheless
... enhances the speeding up of processes. nevertheless, it has paved way for more publications...
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Suggestion: Who
... which nobody would even want to think. who does not like sitting at home and order...
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...mation rendered and not the vice versa. it is true that media and internet have ca...
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Suggestion: However
...ge through the mass media and internet. however, parents and educational institutions m...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an advantageous manner" with adverb for "advantageous"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cide to use the mass media and internet in an advantageous manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, whereas, while, for instance, as a result, it is true, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2450.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 498.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91967871486 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8028043108 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572289156627 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2431410305 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.92 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268579761334 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566740691799 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629818904509 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145241616305 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417585299688 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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