A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The recommentation claims that all students of a nation should be subjected to the same national curriculum before they enter college. A nation should presumably treat all of its citizens with egalitarianism, so such recommendation would sound reasonable at first sight. However, idiosyncrasies of each individual may undermine that hidebound syllabus.
There are some basic subjects that all students must be aware of, because they are necessary to the comprehension of the world and more advanced topics. It is not conceivable, for example, to wipe out math or language from the basic curriculum. These are paramount subjects independent of the career a student might pursuit. Math has applications in a wide range of fields, from engineering to medicine; language in not less important. It is a vital subject in the extent that eloquence is a valuable feature in the professional and social life. Therefore, I agree that basic subjects should comprise an unified national curriculum and they should be taught for every student regardless their preferred fields of study.
Conversely, a government should also provide to its students some possibilities outside that common package. It is important that a student has some interaction with subjects he might see in the college. This could help him to realize that maybe the career he is thinking to purrsue is not so exciting as he thought it would be. Thus, this could help this individual to choose a course more suitable with his preferences in his future attending a college. There are, for example, a lot of people following careers, because of their parents aptitudes. A son of a lawyer may feel excited about working in a court in the future. By having the opportunity to study some basic law subjects before college, he could find out that being an attorney is not as thrilling as he imagined. He could then save a precious time by not starting a course he would probably quit afterward.
In sum, the existance of a common national curriculum to be applyed to all the students is warranted. Yet, the subjects composing that ensemble should be circumscribed to the most basic ones. Moreover, the system should not be rigid; students should have some flexibility to add to their curricuclum some subjects related to their preferences as a future undergraduate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11286089239 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00078408429 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514435695538 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9096556316 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.4 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215335764686 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069014724007 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820937303086 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157346354843 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0895271480975 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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