Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Major cities are of great importance to a country, because they generally are accountable for providing a substantial amount of monetary resources a government need to manage its nation. In order to maintain this continuous generation of incomes, those cities need heavy investments, not commensurable, in its majority, to the ones received by small cities. In the cultural aspect, however, small prerecints should not be neglected by a government. They should also get the financial support they need.
Small cities can capture intrincic aspects of a nation by being less susceptible to foreign influence than megalopolis. Because of their importance regarding economical features, the latter can provide more opportunities and great amenities to their citizens. People from all over the country and even the world are then attracted by the better conditions they may found in such places, what ends up raising the population there. This provokes a change in the cultural characteristics of those major cities, because people bring with them all their beliefs and traditions from their homelands. Thus, some cultural traits of a society might be distorted or lost in such places.
Minor cities, conversely, are less impacted by this globalization. They do not have many resources to provide good facilities, and better professional and financial conditions to the society as major cities do. They are usually composed by people who were born there, or by the ones looking for a more placid place to live. This way strong cultural aspects are more likely to be preserved in this places. Thus, if the reason for providing financial resources to a place is to keep the cultural aspects of a society unscathed, a government should dedicate a parcel of its investments to small cities too.
Brazil, for example, is a country with a vast territorial extension. This topological feature turns even more difficult to find a place where all nation’s cultural traditions can be found. Of course, in a major city like São Paulo, one can find small samples of some brazilian cultural traits, but understanding people’s traditions would only be possible by going to their original grounds. For example, I am from Pernambuco, a state in the northeast of Brazil. In major cities of the country it is possible to try some typical foods and listen to a couple of songs from my place. However, this is not a reliable representation of our diet, neither of our music taste. They are usually the more turistic part of them, the more palatable to the globalized inhabitants of the megalopolis.
In conclusion, because of their importance to the country’s growth, major cities must be buttressed by the government with financial resources. However, it is unwarranted that the reason for the investments is to preserve the cultural traits of the society. It is possible to find some traditions of a nation in big cities of a country, but it is in not so globalized corners that they are most ingrained and conserved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, then, thus, for example, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2533.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 492.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14837398374 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00637926966 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465447154472 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5351071614 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.541666667 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289229158587 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814906674485 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644093618054 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189671697222 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679422502427 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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