A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The issue shows a controversial topic whether a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college or not. While it can adds student study task and it may become harder for them, it is an advantage for them for some reason.
first of all, study same national curriculum will make the government easier to evaluate its educational output. having a same curriculum in a nation will set standard competencies between rural area and major cities, so they may have same points to be evaluated, sure this will make education minister evaluating job easier than a vary curriculum. For instance, in indonesia student in the rural area such as papua or west nusa will have same curriculum with student in major cities like jakarta and bandung, also the output of the curriculum will have slight differencies, so the final evaluation test will be equalized between them. it is clear to say that making same final evaluation test will be easier than create number of variety test.
second, same curriculum will make an controllable educational output. With only one national curriculum, a nation will have a more accountable educational output, indeed a countable output can be planned better than an uncountable one. this will make a nation education more planned and more close to its realization.
In conclusion, a nation that have same curriculum for all of its student have more benefit than the one that dont. Moreover, same curriculum may standarized student's basic knowledge that they need in their college studies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 58.6224719101 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 2235.4752809 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 259.0 442.535393258 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14671814672 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72951400741 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 215.323595506 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505791505792 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2611013352 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.181818182 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5454545455 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.18181818182 5.21951772744 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251616804621 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128578975547 0.0831039109588 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888290077696 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195415923101 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840415655846 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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