A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A survey suggests that nearly half students in colleges complained that they could not keep pace with other students because the the others had learned additional courses which pave the way for college. In order to successfully address this issue, some people recommend that students should be taught the same curriculum before entering college. From my point of view, this recommendation is justifiable not only because it would ensure the equality of fundamental education, but also because it would be more convenient for universities to assess students' learning ability.
To begin with, there is no doubt that the same national syllabus would make sure every student have learnt the same contents before they enter college. Take China as an example. The fundamental education in the country varies from province to province, which is to say, some provinces such as Jiangsu and Shanghai would even involve Calculus which would not be provided until college for the other areas. Consequently, students who have not got in touch with college Maths sometimes feel college courses too arcane to understand. According to current situation, it is necessary to implement a homogeneous syllabus based on national standard so that even students from those poorly-educated areas would have the chance to learn what has been taught in highly-educated areas. To sum up, the implementation of a national curriculum would ensure the equality of fundamental education in different areas.
In addition, it would also help colleges to assess the learning capability of every student according to the same curriculum so that they could decide which student they should accept. For example, nowadays, colleges would spend days or even months to compare each student based on all kinds of assessments. However, since fundamental schools from each area have their own standards for examination due to different curriculum in distinct districts, it is extremely difficult for universities to establish an unbiased and absolutely object criteria to decide which student is better. If there is a national syllabus for every school to teach the same contents, then the academic assessment in each area could be homogenized. Therefore, universities could make their acceptances largely depend on the same assessment or examination. In short, the same national curriculum would institute the same examination to test students’ academic achievement which would make it easier for colleges to pick up students.
Certainly, some people may argue that a national syllabus would undermine some traditional skills such as knitting which is listed in some remote areas in order to prevent local people forgetting these traditions. However, from my perspective, these skills should be counted as after-school activities and would not be affected by the same curriculum. All in all, the recommendation that a national curriculum should be established would improve fundamental educational system a lot.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...t keep pace with other students because the the others had learned additional courses w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, in short, no doubt, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2524.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 460.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48695652174 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97755942232 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484782608696 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 798.3 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5091530246 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.222222222 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5555555556 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.21951772744 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258322963114 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970285032836 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587741862171 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175491516722 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241424256236 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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