A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Many countries around the world have a variety of schools, each of which offer multiple curricula, some of which are nationally mandated, while some follow an international standard like the International Bacclaureate (IB) curriculum. There are some nations that force its citizens to study the same national curriculum until university, but in my opinion, this is an ultimately detrimental idea, for three primary reasons which will be elaborated as follows.
To begin with, having a homogenous nationally mandated curriculum for all students disregards the individual interests of students completely. For instance, if a scientifically-inclined student is forced to learn the name of every river in the country, he would most likely develop a loathing for geography, as well as the education system as a whole. The lack of interest in such subjects would result in a drop in his grades, which would ultimately hinder him from being accepted into his top university. Should a student with a strong interest in astrophysics be denied entry into some of the best astrophysics univeristy programs in the country simply because he could not memorize the names of some rivers? Furthermore, a student forced into a mandatory national curriculum would simply end up wasting so much of time laboring over knowledge that is irrelevant to his life. If a country does not impose this homogenity in curriculum for all high-school students, they would be more free to pursue their interests and might even be happier and less stressed.
Another problem with having all students of a country study the same material until college is the potential to misuse this type of education. Since the national curriculum would be the students' primary source of knowledge, it is very easy to spread propaganda or biased political opinions through the education system. This phenomenon has been happening in China (People's Republic of China) for half a century. With a few exceptions, every Chinese citizen is required to sit the Gaokao examination which is based on a nationally mandated curriculum, which paints the Communist Party in a good light by highlighting its achievements, while convenienty ignoring the atrocities commited by the Party. For instance, the brutal Tiananmen Square massacre, which is widely regarded around the world as a terrible act against democracy, is absent from all of the country's textbooks. When there is no alternative, it is ridiculously easy for a country to inculcate unfailing hypernationalism in its citizens by misusing the education system, which is something that would be unlikely to happen if its students are given a choice as to what national curriculum to follow.
Although some might argue that having the same curriculum for every student in a nation might bridge economic and opportunity gaps, by preventing more economically privileged children from seeking better opportunities through private schools with curricula of higher quality, this view is blind to the underlying problems with the counrty's education system. If a student has to pay extra to receive better quality education, perhaps the true problem is a lacking national curriculum, rather than economic inequality. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that a country's citizens must be forced to study the same national curriculum until college.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 844, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, well, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2819.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35931558935 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07615901223 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528517110266 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 910.8 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.8525610233 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.823529412 118.986275619 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9411764706 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287579708785 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105267409715 0.0831039109588 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060365059911 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193278565875 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356174824167 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 48.8420337079 67% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 100.480337079 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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