Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Once nature is destroyed, recovery of its state to the original is almost impossible and even just to a certain level requires high cost and long span. In this point of view, putting importance on the preservation of its natural state, the given policy might have been suggested. Although it does make sense, preserving all the remaining intact areas is an over-strict policy without serious considerations of its negative influences on the economy.
Firstly, unable to develop wilderness areas indicates that there are no more additional fields for further development. One might argue that further necessary facilities such as department stores or gyms can be built in the areas where development has been already conducted, in other words, where wilderness is already harmed. However, it might be impossible for huge constructions such as airports or research centers. Those certain facilities require vast areas without other tall buildings around the place – developing wilderness areas is inevitable. Since their expected economic values are tantamount, it will be unsound to forgo to build those facilities to any nations. Therefore, the strict policy to ban further development of wild areas is hardly hold water.
Secondly, it is an inapplicable policy to developing countries as they inevitably need to develop their wilderness areas for economic growth. While developed countries already equipped with the necessary facilities such as international airports, some developing countries do not. The restriction of developing wild areas to those developing countries will prevent them from achieving an economic transition to the next step. As a result, the policy will worsen the inequity among the countries. For the possible malign effects to their economy, the policy will not be able to obtain legitimacy from those countries.
Preservation of nature is one of the most important values to human beings. However, the restriction in developing wilderness is the lack of consideration of what the policy will result in the countries’ further development and how it will worsen the economic inequity among countries. Therefore, the suggested policy will not be able to obtain a full acceptance from nations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...veloping all the villages and cities is must to count a country as a developed nation. ...
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Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...try as a developed nation. The issue of whether or not to preserve the deserted areas is a con...
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Line 2, column 401, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...g units to use its own resources and it is currently depending on the economic values of importing the...
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Line 2, column 743, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'product'?
Suggestion: product
... so that instead of exporting a primary products or raw material to other countries it c...
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Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th major amount of deserted area have no other alternative that using it. For exa...
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Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'richest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: richest
...ng it. For example, Dubai is one of the most richest cities and it is completely a deserted ...
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Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the richest'.
Suggestion: most the richest
...ng it. For example, Dubai is one of the most richest cities and it is completely a deserted ...
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Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...species and precious recourses that has be preserved. In such a case it should be ...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... for many undiscovered flora and fauna. Therefore it should be considered important to pr...
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Line 6, column 133, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
... this wilderness areas for building the economical stability in a country. These areas can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, as for, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3247.0 2235.4752809 145% => OK
No of words: 646.0 442.535393258 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02631578947 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0414809386 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76054806461 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438080495356 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1053.0 704.065955056 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.514914712 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.965517241 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.275862069 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06896551724 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23286408502 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802903487823 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503926895626 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149875319236 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523843804725 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 100.480337079 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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