Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The shortage of natural resources is a paramount subject in the modern world. Since the industrial revolution, the planet has been suffering the consequences of a massive eagerness for monetary gains. As far as I am concerned, nations should start to take preservation of wilderness sites for granted, they should create laws and policies to preclude the overexploration of the earth's natural places, as the destruction of those places can be deleterious to the society in many ways.
By circumscribing the possible interactions with the wild enviromnent, governments will probably have to deal with a decrease in the economic gains at first. Companies usually do not see investiments in the preservation of nature as salutary. Instead, they usually wish to explore the milieu in order to produce money from the resources usage. Coversely, they could benefit from a policy of preservation as the debilitation of the environment can affect their production in a long term, especially if their main resources are non-renewable.
Additionally, the lack of enough pristine areas can affect people's health. We are already suffering from the so-called maladies of the modern world like depression, stress and so on. Who can assure that they are not mostly caused by the aggressive depletion of the planet`s resources along the years? It is hard to look for a placid place to take a rest when you are in a megalopolis like New York City, for example, and all you can see are buildings around your head. Sometimes people just need to be reintegrated to natural areas so that they can be recuperated from a disease.
In conclusion, even if a nation needs to aim its economical growth, there has to be a balance between the exploration of the environment and the potential gains that such activity could bring to the society. The depletion of the wilderness areas can not only temper with the sustainability of those earnings, but it can also affect people`s health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'resources'' or 'resource's'?
Suggestion: resources'; resource's
...lieu in order to produce money from the resources usage. Coversely, they could benefit f...
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Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 324.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1049382716 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11743673993 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564814814815 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4163187421 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.142857143 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231426162173 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674176817255 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537570051394 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133923986468 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296538596585 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.