Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The advantages of preserving wilderness outweighs that of extricate the same area for small and short term economic gain, therefore nations should pass laws to protect wilderness areas in their pristine condition.
Firstly, we fail to recognize that forests act at air purifiers and it will cost us trillions of dollars if we try to replace them with machines of equivalent throughput. The short term economic gain would be minute as compared to the long term disastrous effects in the absence of wilderness area. Already we have cleared more than three fourths of the forest around the Nile area and at this rate it is predicted that we would clear out majority of the forest area in next decade. Therefore is it critical that something should be done to protect the remaining wilderness area. Strict government laws to preserve remaining wilderness area would aid in stopping the otherwise inevitable catastrophe.
Furthermore, economic gains can coexist with preservation of wilderness. National reserves, where people can take safari to appreciate nature can help educate the tourists and at the same time generate revenue. This revenue can be used to create awareness and protect the wilderness areas. It is important to understand that in the absence of strict policy, shrewd businesses will take advantage and cause irreversible harm to any remaining forest. Therefore a strict law should be passed by nations as soon as possible because with each passing second there is a destruction of one more forest.
To sum up, the advantages of preserving forests outweigh the small profits from the destruction and development in that area. Hence, nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining forests in their pristine condition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...rity of the forest area in next decade. Therefore is it critical that something should be...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...eversible harm to any remaining forest. Therefore a strict law should be passed by nation...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, therefore, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 279.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25089605735 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79396601012 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1691689008 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.692307692 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299763175586 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119248561687 0.0831039109588 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868157361603 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21612683413 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700105535428 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.