Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Arts is an inherent part of any society, every country, civilization has experienced arts playing a vital role in society. Arts has put countries on the world map example Italy is famous for its rich art history, it has given role models such as Leonardo da Vinci, Michael Angelo etc. to the society and have provided individual with income. The prompt recommends that a nation whose citizens are hungry and unemployed should suspend the government funding for arts. Such a recommendation goes to the extreme when it calls out for the funding to be suspended and should require qualification for following reasons.
Firstly, every country has art galleries, museums, theatres, arts school where today numerous people work and earn their bread and butter. For example, Seattle arts museum today has over 100 plus staff which works their full time. There are people who are part of maintenance team, art experts for answering questions from the visitors, accountant managing the accounts of the museum and several other people executing other tasks as part of their full-time job. Also, not to forget the artists who display their work in the gallery of the museum. These displays of their work results in sale of the work and income for the artist. Suspending the funding for arts will impact the workers who are employed in these institutions as less or no funding might ask for head count reduction. If such a situation arises then the prompt recommendation will in fact exacerbate the existing condition of unemployment.
Secondly, government of a nation funds numerous activities and fields such as arts, sport, wildlife preservation. Also, there are subsidies provided to farmers, people for certain areas of the country etc. To put in other words, it is not that government funding is done only for arts but for other sectors as well. It is very important to understand how will suspending the funding for the arts help improve the existing situation of unemployment and lack of food for the citizens. It is crucial to get answer to the question, “will suspending the art funding be enough to tackle the existing problem?” On the contrary, by continuing to fund arts and allowing it to flourish might lead to employment generation and can ameliorate the unemployment problem. With arts flourishing the artists will get the confidence to be bold and try new things which might result in improved employment opportunities for citizens of the nation. Consider a film director who has been planning to direct a movie which involves high technology graphic and need for visual graphics, he was unable to direct such a movie earlier as the funds were not there but with government funding, he is now willing to make such a movie. This movie will create job for people who have visual graphic and high technology graphic skills. Similarly, other ventures in art might create job opportunities provided the funding continues. these job opportunities ultimately will result in improving the hunger problem.
Finally, one may say if not suspension of the funding then a reduction such as 5 or 10% from the existing funding can be used in other programs developed to fight the existing condition of unemployment and hunger. By following such an approach, a balance can struck there by not impacting the arts and at the same time able to take some money and divert it to other programs solely focused on improving the ongoing issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...s over 100 plus staff which works their full time. There are people who are part of maint...
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Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing might ask for head count reduction. If such a situation arises then the prompt...
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Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'suspend'
Suggestion: suspend
...s very important to understand how will suspending the funding for the arts help improve t...
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Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'suspend'
Suggestion: suspend
... get answer to the question, 'will suspending the art funding be enough to tackle the...
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Line 5, column 1410, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...unities provided the funding continues. these job opportunities ultimately will resul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, well, for example, in fact, such as, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2873.0 2235.4752809 129% => OK
No of words: 572.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02272727273 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7459436873 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487762237762 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 872.1 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3520775441 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.708333333 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240835992015 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781804838899 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631587824059 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14952349905 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726273637114 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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