“Our declining environment may bring the people of the world together as no politician, philosopher,
or war ever could. Environmental problems are global in scope and respect no nation’s boundaries.
Therefore, people are faced with the choice of unity and cooperation on the one hand or disunity and
a common tragedy on the other.”
While environment issues are common factors across the globe, there are many very perspectives on the necessity and prioritization of addressing these issues. Additionally, in the argument, the key roles other events and people have had in uniting the role have been glossed over. Because of the significant role of many events and public figures and the factions present within the topic of environmental issues, the declining environment may not be the most uniting global force we have encountered yet.
Unfortunately, there are many divisions on the necessity of action on various environmental issues. For example, the hotly debated issue of global warming has formed strong factions across the globe. Many individuals believe that global warming is occurring due to human activities and should be counteracted. However, others believe that global warming is occurring at a natural rate, unaffected by human activity, and thus, should not be counteracted. Still other groups deny that global warming is occurring. In American politics, this is a hotly debated issue that influences voting patterns and has been taken up as significant issues by the major political parties. This is just one example of how polarized and divided environmental issues are in today’s society. Because of these differing opinions on environmental issues, the declining environment will not be the most uniting global event thus far.
While environmental issues may not be globally uniting due to the strong divisions within the issues, many other events and public figures have created strong global unions. Events in history such as the tearing down of the Berlin Wall, marking the end of an era of oppression and division, had a globally uniting effect. Additionally, important leaders like Nelson Mandela, Martin Luther King Jr., and Ghandi, had philosophies on peaceful resistance of racism and oppression that affected and united the world in combating racism, oppression, and other issues peacefully. Events or leaders such as these had strongly uniting effects across the world that may outweigh the global union created by environmental issues.
Therefore, due to the division created over environmental issues and the significant uniting effect other events or leaders have had globally, the declining environment across the world will likely not bring the world to an previously unseen level of cooperation and unity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
..., and thus, should not be counteracted. Still other groups deny that global warming i...
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Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...orld will likely not bring the world to an previously unseen level of cooperation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, as for, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48663101604 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90156111067 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467914438503 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9507316753 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.25 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125396079101 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479525393242 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339872684559 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889944994196 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158908220188 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.