People most respect the powerful not when they exercise their power, but when they refrain from exercising it.
What aspect of power endangers the most respect? When they show us their opportunities or when they possess mercy? Some would argue that power reflects in control of others through the active doings, such as raising of a huge army or punishing those who do not agree with us. However, others would state that inaction and refrain from using of power is a sign of true power. It can be shown in clemency to a criminal or inability to take critics from people around us. After weighing the evidence, it is certain that avoiding of using power without high demand cause respect to a person. People are respect most not those who have a lot of power and show it in any case, but those who understand the meaning of force and do not push the envelope.
To begin with, some that would insist that a demonstration of power moves people to respect the subject might point to dictators. Those people could say that most citizens of a state with a dictator respect their leader so much that follows any order or initiative that he/she creates. The authority is so high that it happens without hesitation. One of dictators from modern history is Stalin who constantly exercised his power. The people who think that showing of power causes respect could say that Russian population pay respect Stalin. Nonetheless, the main feeling of the population was not respected to the leader but fear. This fear is to be blamed in a crime that they did not commit. A fear that the can appear in Siberia for a denunciation. This burden of fear that the great part Russians of that time experienced, did not leave a room for respect. So if someone turns to exercising of power to cause respect, she/he will not achieve it. The result will be inducing of the fear not the true and internal respect.
On the other hand, leaders who manage state without using excessive power cause respect. A proof can be found in ancient time that is Solomon who probably was a king of Israel. The most information that we have about him is from Bible, so we cannot be sure in the historical accuracy of his existence. In Hebrew Bible, Old Testament it is said that he was very wisdom and peaceful person. All of those prevent him from experiencing power without a necessity. For example, he had mercy and left his brother in peace, despite the fact that the brother wanted to grab the throne. So Solomon had never pushed the limit in terms of power and that is the principal reason why his peers admired and respected him. Therefore, people respect people who are able to avoid exercising power.
Ultimately, after considering both sides of the issue, it must be concluded that refrain from exercising of power is most respected. This is because people who avoid using power are not afraid of the consequences and are able to face the critics. Those traits are respected by other since people do not hide from responsibility and alternative views in overusing of power.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, for example, such as, in any case, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 32.0 11.3162921348 283% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2422.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 518.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67567567568 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47538228944 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469111969112 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6575577987 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.5172413793 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8620689655 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89655172414 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43224511487 0.243740707755 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11208388286 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911704146756 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277019570305 0.150359130593 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063239811219 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.