People should question the rules of authority as opposed to accepting them passively.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the reasons for which the statement may or may not be true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
After thousands of years of development, human societies developed into a common system that now most countries in the world share: the system that citizens are willing to sacrifice some of their freedom to be ruled under a government carrying great power and dealing with huge public problems in order to make every citizen’s life better. While this system seems to be working decently, nowadays, there is still heated debate on whether people should question the rules of authority. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the statement for the following reasons.
First of all, people have the right to retrieve the power they give to those who govern them. Every human being has his or her own right of freedom; however, it is our unstated contract in human society that we give up a little bit of our freedom to form the authority and establish rules. In this case, of course people should pay attention and see if the authority use its power in the correct way.
While people who disagree with this contention may argue that if people keep raising questions and challenge for government, they would hinder the work efficiency and restrain government’s ability. However, as the proverb says, power tends to corrupt, and absolute power corrupt absolutely. People’s concern for every policy and decision of the authority serves as great supervision for the power. Therefore, it is obvious that citizens’ scrutiny is positive and helpful for the development of whole society since government will have less chance to abuse its power.
To sum up, given the reason discussed above, we may safely come to the conclusion that people should question the authority as long as in a reasonable way not only because it is their natural right to do so, but also these challenges and questions will urge the authority to perform better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ract in human society that we give up a little bit of our freedom to form the authority an...
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Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a reasonable way" with adverb for "reasonable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...hould question the authority as long as in a reasonable way not only because it is their natural ri...
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Line 7, column 292, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l urge the authority to perform better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, of course, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 2235.4752809 69% => OK
No of words: 309.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00647249191 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71259579963 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595469255663 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.1642177452 60.3974514979 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.636363636 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0909090909 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17699934265 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721338433661 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425346460785 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108522786629 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267435881668 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.