People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The issue presents the debating topic that people should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences. But what i believe that people should take risk without caring about consequences. If we considered the consequences then it wouldn't be risky and it has no excitement to carry the job which remains banal and uninteresting. Life must be full of thrillers emotion like a movie to experience and learn. In fact life is an experiment where we learn by doing and experiencing.
I believe that searching for the consequence is loss in time and halting of the progress. one should be always ready with the plan of caring out job no matter how risky it is. only success comes in expense of risk. no one is going to be awarded for being coward and reluctant in carrying risk. If we look for the consequence then we might find them intimidating and daunting to take the job, in fact we are always hesitant to do the job but being fearless and taking risk would surely bring success on our path. for instance Tenzing Norgay Shrepa and Edmund Hillary would never conquer the success of climbing worlds highest peak MT Everest if they would be hesitant to take risk of life in climbed Everest. Besides this there are numerous examples of people who have achieved success of taking risk say, Neil Armstrong, Edwin Aldrin and Michel Who made first spaceship With men to moon successful. Elon Musk, Galileo Who took risks in the life to achieve fame.
People may aver that taking risk leads to the failure. Without knowing consequence we might fall and may not reach to destination. Also people might not fell safe to invest where there is risk. But there is always solution behind risks and its consequence. for instance there is mechanism of risk transfer. to illustrate businessman can minimize risk by transferring to the insurance company in expense of money and premium. We must also learn from people who had undertaken the risk and tackled them. There can be many other ways to minimize and control risk associated with it.
Finally, I would like to repeat the fact the success is always behind the mirror of risk. Unless we break and tackle with risk we are not gonna achieve success thus People should undertake risky action but must have plan and learn tackling the risk.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
...y considered its consequences. But what i believe that people should take risk wi...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
... we considered the consequences then it wouldnt be risky and it has no excitement to ca...
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...ss in time and halting of the progress. one should be always ready with the plan of...
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Suggestion: No
... only success comes in expense of risk. no one is going to be awarded for being co...
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Suggestion: For
...would surely bring success on our path. for instance Tenzing Norgay Shrepa and Edmu...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'worlds the highest'.
Suggestion: worlds the highest
...d never conquer the success of climbing worlds highest peak MT Everest if they would be hesita...
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...hesitant to take risk of life in climbed Everest. Besides this there are numerous...
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Suggestion: Also,
... fall and may not reach to destination. Also people might not fell safe to invest wh...
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...ution behind risks and its consequence. for instance there is mechanism of risk tra...
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Suggestion: To
...ce there is mechanism of risk transfer. to illustrate businessman can minimize ris...
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Line 7, column 217, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...ld undertake risky action but must have plan and learn tackling the risk.
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Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to tackle'.
Suggestion: to tackle
...sky action but must have plan and learn tackling the risk.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, look, may, so, then, thus, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49847953764 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9533553691 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3043478261 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3913043478 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162641661972 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0557623012703 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737993107324 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122524650725 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0717800533247 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.