People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position
More often than not, people seek the safest, most stable methods to pursue their lives: a majority of students attend college because they are more likely to land a job, employees remain in jobs they no longer enamored with because they may not be able to find another, etc. Even though these conservative actions lead to a more secure lifestyle, some decisions need to be risky in order for individuals to feel as though they have led a fulfilling life. Thus, people should take daring actions, only if they passionately believe in themselves and their decision, even if they have not prudently considered all the consequences. Meticulous planning is necessary in certain instances, while fearless daring is required in others.
Firstly, careers are an area where consequences of risky actions should be considered, especially when other people will be affected by one's actions. Take for example, a single mom who is no longer happy at her job, but has a family to feed and take care of. If she were to take a risk and quit her job without fully thinking of all the consequences, her family will suffer alongside her. In this case, she would need to carefully consider the way she quits, so she stays on good terms with the company, and other possible jobs or solutions before undertaking the action. Thus, it is important to note that more thought is required when others are involved or dependent on someone. In this case, a risky action of quitting her job should not be taken until she has considered all the possible consequences so she can be ready for the future.
Conversely, individual people should follow their passions, regardless of whether they are certain about the outcome, since risky actions are considered risky for their unpredictability. It is impossible to know whether or not the action will lead to success or failure. For example, Mark Zuckerberg dropped out of college because he was passionate about creating Facebook, even though he had no clue that it would one day be the paragon of social media. Without considering the consequences of dropping out of college, he followed his passion with full belief in himself. It is for this reason that Facebook became as successful as it was. If he has carefully considered all the consequences and outcomes of his action and decided against it because of the sheer unlikeliness of success, Facebook may not have been created, Zuckerberg may have received a decent education and landed a well-paying job, but he would not achieved the levels of success that he did. Often times, knowing the consequences associated with a risk prevents people from following through, which is why people should rely on their passion when taking risky decisions and jump in with full force.
Taking everything into account, this issue is increasingly complex and depends on the situation. Without knowing what type of risk an individual is taking, how they feel about the risk and their abilities, it is difficult to argue that all risks should be carefully considered. Although certain situations require more meticulous planning, other risks are solely based on chance or one's passion and ability to adapt as their actions unfold.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 843, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ces so she can be ready for the future. Conversely, individual people should fol...
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Line 9, column 213, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...redictability. It is impossible to know whether or not the action will lead to success or fail...
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Line 9, column 921, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'achieve'
Suggestion: achieve
...ded a well-paying job, but he would not achieved the levels of success that he did. Ofte...
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Line 13, column 383, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...her risks are solely based on chance or ones passion and ability to adapt as their a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2668.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 533.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00562851782 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80487177365 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71766435601 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49530956848 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 837.9 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0502047499 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.4 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.65 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201937815399 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646760342826 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492205363795 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119976725348 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423908177478 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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