People who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In deve

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People who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

What is ‘critical’ and who is the most critical person? It is not a simple task to identify which person is more critical. The prompt states that the extent of commitment to the idea or policy could be a criterion. In my opinion, I agree with this idea and argue that the more people are devoted to an idea or policy, the more critical they are of it for two reasons.
First of all, would it be possible to be ‘truly’ critical in specific subject without deeply being committed? It does not necessarily be the case. Being a critical person requires a lot of knowledge and enthusiasm per se. Who were regarded critical people in historical perspective? I can suggest some historical pioneers such as Thomas Edison, Albert Einstein, Von Noiman, and so on. They all are considered as great people in their fields. The way they could be such a great would have been their deep devotion to their areas. For example, Thomas Edison realized the inconvenience of life without light, which led the marvelous invention of light bulb. Albert Einstein committed his life to reveal the unknown theory at his time, which led to prove the Theory of Relativity. In other words, by being into the area, they were able to know which parts were missed in the human knowledge and devote their life to shed new light on the critical thinking. Thus, I believe that the commitment to an idea or policy is a necessary condition to be a critical person.
Then, how about being ‘not critical’? Without having critical attitude, it is hard to devote to some areas. Being a critical person is the paramount importance in commitment. For instance, a student who has never been critical might have no experience in devoting some specific subjects. If he only passively receives the information at school without criticism, he cannot have any chance to be into that area. Suppose that he is learning about history and he is just trying to memorize all the things while studying. Would it be interesting for him? He will not have interest in history subject if he does not have to take exam. In this case, it cannot be a ‘true devotion’. To deeply commit in the subject, it should be practiced voluntarily and actively. Therefore, having a critical attitude is the foremost requirement to the commitment.
Of course, some may argue that there are many people who are deeply committed to an idea while never being critical. The may suggest that our hard working neighbors who are really devoting to their works are not necessarily critical. However, I believe that those cannot be truly devoted people. If there is no restriction to do their work in everyday life, they will not devote to the work entirely.

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...dea while never being critical. The may suggest that our hard working neighbors who are...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, of course, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 19.5258426966 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83690987124 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81125053089 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467811158798 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 727.2 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0540970733 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.1333333333 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5333333333 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23333333333 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154191922968 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047399059784 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457682302559 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116587397831 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067469766537 0.0667264976115 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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