People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
People’s behaviors are the reactions to those things which are ahead of them. I generally agree with the claim that people’s behaviors are largely determined by external forces rather than their own making. We live in the age of information and technology, which made it possible for everyone to be in touch with new information from around the globe and there is high chance of people being influenced from external forces. However, the author’s claims raises question about non-conformism. There may be some cases in which people tend to follow in their own footsteps rather than others.
First, we have abundant of evidences which show people’s way of everyday life is being hugely influenced by external forces. For example, I have seen young generation in my country wearing idiosyncratic clothes that looks bizarre in the eyes of ordinary people in my country. They have started wearing western hip-hop fashion; eating foreign foods such as Pizza, burger, in restaurant. So, I think this is not the way of life that they had in the past, their food habits and way of dressing is under the influence of popular trend in the market.
Secondly, every people should follow the established tradition in the society for the co-existence. It is important for everyone to be compatible with the current trend of society. For example, in the modern days of information and technology, everyone should get comfortable with the basic technology that they encounter everyday with. As a result, people should strive to learn that technology. Computer education has become essential for everyone in today’s world and accordingly, even if someone is not willing to learn, he/she is forced to get accustom with computer technology. Consequently, his everyday life is different from what it would have been if he chose to live in his own way.
Admittedly, the author’s claim seems to undermine the notion of non-conformism. In every society, there are people who want to live their life differently than what people at large do. For example, a ethnic group called ‘Raute’ in Nepal are still living in Jungle. External social dynamics has not affected them yet. They enjoy their own way of life in Jungle. They do not seek for the modern convenient lifestyle. However, people’s behaviors are largely determined by the dynamics of the society in general.
In conclusion, even if some people choose to live their own way of life and tend to get less affected by external forces, but most of the people’s behaviors are largely affected by external forces.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...he basic technology that they encounter everyday with. As a result, people should strive...
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Suggestion: an
...n what people at large do. For example, a ethnic group called 'Raute' i...
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Suggestion:
...et less affected by external forces, but most of the people's behaviors are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, for example, i think, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18764845606 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94694234234 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482185273159 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6106213627 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9565217391 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3043478261 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378610755232 0.243740707755 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115362633288 0.0831039109588 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145071035773 0.0758088955206 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232112577298 0.150359130593 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129977065888 0.0667264976115 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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