People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Society is group of people following different cultures, traditions etc., Ultimately, for a non catastrophic environment everyone must adhere to certain principles that are defined by the law be it Democracy or Republic. I mostly agree with the claim that people's behavior in this society is largely determined by forces and not of their own making. I would support my thesis by presenting two examples in favour of claim and one example against it.
Firstly, as we all know that the current world is mostly driven by money. Decisions people make during investment plans of their savings is mostly driven by the big giants in the society. For example, in the recent days we know the decisions taken in Cryptocurrency world. The subject as such is quite esoteric and so is not something that is understandable by a common man. But, everybody knows the investment is multiplied fast. So, everybody wants to invest in Cryptocurrencies. This thought process of people is making the price of Cryptocurrencies like Bitcoin increase exponentially over last few decades. Thus their behavior is largely determined by the monetary giants in this society and not on their own decision making skills.
Secondly, culture is one important thing that people inherit from others. For example, India now being a developing country and wanting to become a developed country is emulating multiple strategies inspiring from the western countries. For example, let's take the example of productivity website CraigList in United States which lists accomodations so that people who are new to cities can find home quickly. This concept is existing in US from a long time. This is very new to India and is copied from US. India has something called "housing.com", "NestAway", etc., for this purpose. The decision making of one class is thus driven by another, in this case India relying on US.
On the contrary, history has produced so many iconoclasts who went against the popular beliefs in proving their results. For example, consider Galileo who postulated Heliocentric Theory. He was condemned by the church and has been rusticated out of the society. But, after applying Kepler's Laws of Motion, Mathematics has proved Galileo to be right. So, it is not the forces in the nature that is driving every class in this society, but there are certain heretic people who believe in their principles and ultimately become successful thus gaining name and fame.
In conclusion, the topic of people's behavior in this society as observed in above examples is a complex one and has got no easy answers. In my opinion, it is mostly defined by forces in the nature but in some exceptional cases there are people who do their own decision making and excel in their career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 455.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10769230769 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00608407742 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518681318681 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.4071724531 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.96 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151943360944 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408795315856 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633060233719 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900054894368 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344133854812 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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