People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author asserts that the people’s behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making on this remark I would like to put forward some examples which will show that people show the behaviour stated above in some cases but its not the necessary reaction all times.
One reaction can be taking a certain decision on an issue of public interest, For example if a person is to make a decision for donation to an event of communal harmony that is collecting funds for helping disable people to fight their maladies. So, in this case if in a group of 5 people, if 4 person decides to donate a certain amount of money for the cause then it would be ideal for the candidate left to donate the same amount and get influenced by the other group members. In this scenario, its not a very crucial decision that’s changing the person’s lifestyle.
If we consider another case in which a person is to take a decision regarding his future, where he has two choices either to go for higher studies or he can do a job in a company. If in this case, the person needs to enumerate into a list of checkpoints that are necessary to make a decision that’s not temperamental. If the person’s friend who is prosperous enough to take admission to a university requiring exorbitant fees is an ideal decision for it because he can afford it but its not a perfect decision for the person who cannot afford the high fees. So, in this the person has to take a reclusive decision rather than going with the force and indulging into a troublesome situation.
These are some of the examples that I think is able to justify my point that on some cases its ideal to go with the force and in other cases it’s not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...is case if in a group of 5 people, if 4 person decides to donate a certain amount of m...
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Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... other group members. In this scenario, its not a very crucial decision that's...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...decision that's not temperamental. If the person's friend who is prosper...
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Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...to a troublesome situation. These are some of the examples that I think is able to justif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, so, then, as to, for example, i think, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1420.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 313.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53674121406 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66934389115 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498402555911 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.4750699925 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.777777778 118.986275619 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.7777777778 23.4991977007 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113669056371 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506936913878 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395728372945 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755375768572 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343416278815 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.8420337079 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.8971910112 147% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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