People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
One classic assertion stated: ‘we are the product of the choices we make’. However, the extent to which we are entitled to make decision varies vastly across individuals. Some believes that we are all born equal, however, the preceding facts tell us otherwise. Legally, from the moment we are born till the age of adulthood, we are granted with unique set of roles and responsibility, which confine how we act in the society. Secondly, dependent on where and how we were brought up, our right to speak, to eat and to choose our career bestowed by government, society and family is tremendously different. However, I still support the ideology that we are at helm to make endeavor to reach our destiny.
Being a consensus regulation across the world, under-age child and juvenile are seldom permitted to make many selections in life. This is absolutely normal for kids to have minimal say in what foods to consumes, which school to go and who to be friend with as their cognitive skills have yet to be developed for them to act independently. Thus, adults around them such as their parents, teachers, governors should assist them in making this decision. However, it doesn’t mean that they should be constricted to a set of strict rules like those being practiced in Asian society, where infants are raised under an over-protected environment. Not only does this jeopardize their self-esteem and confidence at such young age but also detriment their ability to properly educate their future offsprings.
Even when we have fully grown and independent enough to act, we are still coerced by the legal force and virtue standard set by our society, more specifically, the country we are born. Comparing different society practices, Democracy nations are seemingly more open-minded with much higher scale for liberty. Their citizens are given rights to speak, rights to vote and rights to pursue any religion as they please, which the scenario is pretty much adverse in more restricted regions. Let’s take Middle East for an example, where male’s social status and prestige prevails over those beheld by women. In the same context, Middle East citizens are not allowed to choose which theology to worship while freedom of speech is abstinent as well. We could infer that our fundamental rights are almost fixed from the moment we are born.
However, I did encounter numerous cases where perseverance and will has overwritten the rules and virtue enforced by our society on us. There is still hope to make a choice to our final destination by consistent endeavor. As being featured in a recent daily, a Philippino lady who was born in an orthodox family, where she has minimal force around what is happening in her life. She was married to a gentleman who she didn’t love yet bound to live together for life. After a car accident, which took away her ability to walk, she became paralyzed and was abused by her husband. With her will to fight against this vicious wheel, she has overcome her fierce to make the first decision in life by running away from her husband and distance herself from the family. Now, she has become one of the most inspirational speaker for woman rights in Philippines. This story is not only an aspiring note of bravery, it also reminds us that, in spite of all grim circumstances, we do have a choice in life!
In sum, I believe that the existence of law is critical for a stable society, however, our behaviors should be framed beyond what the law tells us. Also, in situation where choice seems to be restrained, we must be able to accumulate efforts and strength from our virtue believes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 69, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...erous cases where perseverance and will has overwritten the rules and virtue enforc...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'hoped'.
Suggestion: hoped
...ed by our society on us. There is still hope to make a choice to our final destinati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 33.0505617978 215% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3040.0 2235.4752809 136% => OK
No of words: 617.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92706645057 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98392262146 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68574701932 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 327.0 215.323595506 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529983792545 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 966.6 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 6.24550561798 320% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4291100292 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.923076923 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7307692308 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80769230769 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103630033291 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0308391406674 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282945715374 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0588858922971 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239701770863 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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