People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppo

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

In the world and in our immediate surroundings, there is a myriad of forces that do not depend on majority of people; therefore, people cannot decide about them. Furthermore, these factors are not only independent from us, but they can affect, more or less, our behavior and even our lives. However, human way of acting is a very complex phenomenon. It varies from person to person. Not all people are independent of the external impacts in the same way and level. It is too far to say that the external forces can entirely define our behavior.

Firstly, one important aspect on which human behavior depends is the power of the human intelligence and education. Intelligent people and, also, educated people are strong enough to be independent. It is true that governments often require from their nations to behave by the rules and low implemented by the ruler in order to control the people and, in that way, enforce his power. This happens in the countries with oppressive systems, such as Cuba, where the leaders have an absolute power. Oscar Wilde’s statement that “Discontent is the first step in the progress of a man or a nation” illustrates how in the case if the people ‘open their eyes’, instead of blindly following their leaders, that would represent the first step towards their freedom and a better life.

Secondly, Oscar Wilde, being aware about the facts about the human nature, many decades ago stated that “the public have an insatiable curiosity to know everything, except what is worth knowing.” It is sad, but true to say, that the world, till today, did not change much. In the countries not economically developed enough that their nation can forget about everyday survival and think about their intellectual progress, interfering in the lives of the others, is an entertainment. These people live in their local communities following stereotypical models of provincial life. Afraid to become better and different, they behave by the other’s expectations. Otherwise, they will not be accepted in the society. This subculture is also present in the countries who were the oldest world civilizations, such as Egypt. However, examples of the same behavior can be found in the most developed countries such as the US as well. An example is Hollywood, famous for being a big village. The reason for this is an interest of all people to know everything about the celebrities’ private lives which, even more sadly, rises the competitiveness between the celebrities. In order to further increase their glory and budget, they sometimes behave in the way that, puts in question the level of culture. Additionally, nowadays there are so many types of reality TV shows such as Big Brother. They represent a modern style of ruling over the people. The goal of these TV shows is to occupy people’s mind so they act following the examples of their idols from realities and do not focus on real life quality. Here, again the education and intelligence play an important rule showing that when they are not on the high level, people are easily controlled.

On the other hand, everyone is expected to act by the law. Without the law the humans would live in anarchy. This would dismiss any chance for human development. The most developed countries today such as Germany or Scandinavian countries, are based on discipline and respect of the law. However, there are also the cases when people have to behave depending on the situation, i.e. the life conditions. The worst example of this is surely the war, when people no matter their intelligence and ambitions, do not have a possibility to study and accomplish their dreams. This means that their acting is largely determined by forces.

In conclusion, human nature and way of behaving are an infinite field of research. There are also many different life conditions on which depends how people will act. Sometimes we are forced to act against our wishes, but more often our actions are in line with our values, capacity and beliefs which proves that humans can be enough strong to decide for themselves and the world they live in.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 100, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, it is true, more or less, in the same way, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 58.6224719101 150% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3465.0 2235.4752809 155% => OK
No of words: 690.0 442.535393258 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02173913043 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12521717326 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81326149578 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 332.0 215.323595506 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48115942029 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 1097.1 704.065955056 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.4626770674 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.02857142857 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.83258426966 331% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128732625865 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326421439743 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295245416604 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799212167369 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148270507241 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 100.480337079 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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