People's behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
A person’s behaviour is a reflection of his thought process. While these thought processes originate in one’s own mind, they are actually shaped by various other factors which are not of their own making. The prompt suggests that, how people behave is largely determined by factors that they have no control over. I mostly agree with the author of the prompt and argue that how people behave is not solely dependent on a factors of his own making but also other factors that affect a person’s thought process for the three following reasons.
To begin with, people’s behaviour is fundamentally, just a reflection of how they respond to a stimuli. When they are faced with a situation, may it be good or bad, their response depends on several factors like the place they are at, the mood they are in, how they have been taught to respond. For instance, if a person is at a library and he faces a difficult situation, he is naturally going to be softer while speaking and dealing with the issue. The ambience one is in has a significant impact on how the person will react. Even though the person may be of a truculent naturally, if he is in the library or a temple, he is less likely to act in an aggressive manner. Similarly, if a soft and placid person is instigated and made fun of, in public, it is possible that he would react in an aggressive way. One’s surrounding play a huge part in how he/she reacts to a situation.
A person’s behaviour is also determined by how he/she has been taught to respond since his childhood. A lot of times, one’s reaction to happiness or sadness is analogous to what his/her parent’s reaction would be in the same case. This is because, one has seen how their parents react at a very early age, and since that time, he/she is taught to respond to certain situation in a certain way. How one behaves also depends on how his close friends and family behave. If a person has a sophisticated group, he is bound to behave in a sophisticated way because of their influence. While, these factors are not the only factors affecting a person’s behaviour, they have a significant impact.
Finally, a person’s behaviour in any situation also depends on the situation. Often, the situation calls for the person to have an aberrant behaviour. For example, during President Nixon’s rule, United States of America fought a world war. Because of the intensity of the situation, Nixon had to behave in a more dynamic and aggressive way. This however, does not mean that president Nixon was an aggressive person. The situation called for him behaving in an aggressive way, and he did. His behaviour was influenced by the situation rather than his own thought process.
People’s behaviour and how they respond to situation is not only based on their own thinking process but also a myriad of other factors. While, it is impossible to say what affects one’s behaviour with certainty, it is clear that there are many factors that come into play, including some, which originate from one’s own mind, and others over which one has no control.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 430, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a factor' or simply 'factors'?
Suggestion: a factor; factors
...eople behave is not solely dependent on a factors of his own making but also other factor...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a stimulus' or simply 'stimuli'?
Suggestion: a stimulus; stimuli
...ust a reflection of how they respond to a stimuli. When they are faced with a situation, ...
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Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an aggressive manner" with adverb for "aggressive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y or a temple, he is less likely to act in an aggressive manner. Similarly, if a soft and placid person...
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Line 5, column 794, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an aggressive way" with adverb for "aggressive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...lic, it is possible that he would react in an aggressive way. One's surrounding play a huge par...
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Line 7, column 544, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a sophisticated way" with adverb for "sophisticated"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...histicated group, he is bound to behave in a sophisticated way because of their influence. While, thes...
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Line 11, column 465, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an aggressive way" with adverb for "aggressive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
.... The situation called for him behaving in an aggressive way, and he did. His behaviour was influenc...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...others over which one has no control.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, may, similarly, so, while, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2621.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8717472119 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83646837688 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436802973978 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2019612721 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.807692308 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23076923077 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114355253118 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373136712157 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370795863041 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0813542520238 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457364957131 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.