The perceived greatness of any political leader has more to do with the challenges faced by that leader than with any of his or her inherent skills and abilities.
Write a response in which you examine your own position on the statement. Explore the extent to which you either agree or disagree with it, and support your reasoning with evidence and/or examples. Be sure to reflect on ways in which the statement might or might not be true, and how this informs your thinking on the subject.
Over thousands of years of human history, we have seen countless political leaders and their stories have been repeated inumerably. Through interesting parables, we often hear of great Kings and Queens who led vast armies. In daily news, we hear of the actions taken by presidents and prime ministers. But, does the perceived greatness of these leaders have more to do with the challenges they have faced or with their inherent skills and abilities? Through my rich life experiences working directly with politicians, I strongly believe it is the latter.
Some may argue that the challenges a leader faces cannot be determined by their inner abilities, but that is not true. Every city, state, and nation has its own set of challenges, which political leaders may or may not choose to address. Great leaders have the inherent skill to take on challenges for the betterment of their people. In my time as an ambassador for a small town in Japan, I witnessed the mayor's incredible abilities and heoric actions almost daily. When a devestating typhoon was encompassing the town, we lived for two weeks in constant rainfall. In this time, the mayor led his people, staying in the city office night by night, refusing to sleep, and instead dedicating his time and energy to work with the other city officials to devise strategies to save lives in all possible deadly scenarios. His greatness was validated firsthand by his actions and the feelings of the townspeople. A mayor without these inherent skills and character may shy away from the challenge, sleeping comfortably at home, while ordering others to do the dirty work. Certainly, nobody would consider him a great leader.
We must also understand that news and parables are not reality, but instead based on the writers' perceptions of the events. Great leaders have a special skill to gather support and attention of many people, who in turn go the extra mile to make them appear greater in news articles. In my own personal experience as a leader of a non-profit in Japan, I find that my supporters constantly exaggerate my skills and achievements, when working with local and national television and radio stations to publicize our work.
In summary, I must reiterate that a leader's greatness is determined much moreso by their inner abilities and skills than of the challenges they face.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...believe it is the latter. Some may argue that the challenges a leader faces cann...
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Line 13, column 37, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
... In summary, I must reiterate that a leaders greatness is determined much moreso by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, while, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01785714286 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71930519268 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7538855685 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.277777778 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278980503951 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865345457359 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804671659511 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172272844481 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382895034016 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.