The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Modern technological advancements have revolutionized the world as we know it from a century ago. Compared to the thousands of years of human history, much of the technological advancements have occurred in a very short period of time. Yet the impact they have had on the human lifestyle changes is very appreciable. I mostly agree with the prompt which mentions the primary goal of technological advancements is to free people up from the mundane tasks, so that they can pursue their interests, by providing the three below explanations.
As recently, we experienced one of the deadly pandemics in human history, COVID-19, a virulent virus causing the deaths of many people which spread like a wildfire. When such a situation demands people to stay in seclusion, avoid contact with the outer world, the primary source of information comes from the media, like television internet, etc. Such technological innovations have helped mankind stay safe and productive in their houses simultaneously being aware of the recent updates about the disease. Such a situation also demands adaptability from the workers to be able to work from home by avoiding going to the office(especially in jobs related to software engineering), thus avoiding hours of time which they otherwise would have spent on commute. However, working from home also comes with its own difficulties, like decreased communication with colleagues, trouble in keeping abreast of the topics currently going on in the work environments, etc.
Secondly, the internet as we know it today has interconnected places on earth and has made information free to access to everyone. One can get information at a click of a button about the opportunities, career guidance, or the ongoing events in any part of the world, which when compared previously would have been an arduous task. By making information easier to access now people can focus on the goals they wish to achieve rather than investing their time gathering relevant information which would help in their decisions. But what one chooses to do with such a technology is entirely dependent on the person, he may choose to take advantage of the information to acquire the required skills, or use it for fraudulent purposes to scam people of their personal data.
Lastly, technology can also be used for corrupt reasons which can have many detrimental effects. For instance, if we consider "enigma" a technology machine used during world war 2 to encrypt the messages of the attack position, which helped germans send messages faster, be able to communicate with ease and reduced much of the time which they would otherwise have spent transferring messages through spy. Even though the technological invention was not done with any harmful intentions in mind, it does not prevent a person from using it for such purposes.
In conclusion, technological advancements may be both useful and deleterious at the same time. Yes, they do provide us with the choice of using it for the betterment of our lives maybe it for efficiency or automating the mundane tasks. But the real use and the intention of the use of technological tools lies with humans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 58.6224719101 145% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2663.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16085271318 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04848041302 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521317829457 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 837.9 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3680435254 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.157894737 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1578947368 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274450875247 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088164785876 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510020740113 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162913704237 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047950343287 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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