Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The author of the issue states that scandals are useful since they include information that no speaker or reformer can easily talk about and people would pay attention to problems of a society in a different way by knowing about scandals. As far as I am concerned, scandals include positive points, but disadvantageous of this type of news mostly overtook the advantageous so I disagree with the statement.
The first and maybe the only positive effect of scandals lies behind the fact that revealing secrets and conspiracies in economic and political fields lead to preventing further growth of illegal actions. For instance, when people suddenly become aware that a famous politician connived a shady business deal, they will rebellion against the government and its corrupt officials. It is apparent that the fear of being notorious scarifies the government and they may relegate the incompetent officials. Additionally, the same situation will hold true for economic state of the government. The majority of embezzlements are done when officials are confident that nobody will know about their illegal contributions and they will achieve whatever they desire by bribery and fraudulent. However, if the scandals report what no speaker could talk about, the rate of financial corruption in the government may decrease.
On the contrary, scandals are sometimes misunderstood by rumors or gossips about personal life of people. Imagine a situation that yellow papers are revealing scandals of the life a Hollywood superstar. In fact, the main reason of giving out this information is gaining profit by selling news and attracting audience and there is no useful change or profit for the society. Moreover, some candidates for presidency or other high-responsibility and competing positions are inclined to disturb their opponents’ reputation by revealing their secrets. For example, how their families are behaving in society or even how they are buying votes of electorates by bribing them. Although this information may seem to be attractive at first sight, but there is not usage and benefit for people behind them except loosing trust to all candidates eventually.
Following that, focusing on the egregious problems that not everyone could easily talk about would bring chaos and feeling of unsafety to the society. When people hear scandals every now and then, they would consider that no one has a privacy and security of personal information anymore. While some specific characters are benefiting of this chaos, it is regular people who would suffer by negative thoughts. Therefore, scandals may not be the best way of reforming and scandals may alleviate some corruption at first but bring further consequences to both society and government.
To conclude, high-profiled information regarding the misconduct and corruption of people in a society are sometimes reveals as scandals by people who are not mostly seeking reformation and rehabilitation. Although fear of being infamous and notorious prohibits some illegal cooperation, it gradually deteriorates social security and safety. Consequently, government should be able to wrest control of the scandals and let them to be known publicly when necessary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... pay attention to problems of a society in a different way by knowing about scandals. As far as I ...
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Line 4, column 178, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
... the society. When people hear scandals every now and then, they would consider that no one has a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2727.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 501.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44311377246 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01965993815 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51497005988 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 860.4 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9210492223 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.857142857 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.21951772744 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 5.13820224719 331% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157964906959 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465088909999 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382362392121 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976761460669 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400116643862 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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