Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
The issue states that the people’s attention is dragged towards a problem only when a Scandal occurs and not when a speaker or reformer try to bring out the attention towards a problem. This statement is partially true because we, as public never pay heed to any reformer who tries to explicitly bring out an issue to us. What a reformer is not able to do, a scandal does. Only then, we open our eyes to look into the problems we face. But as we can see that people have become more responsible towards their problem. They try to confront their problem and try to bring the attention of the people. In this case scandals are not required.
Nowadays, scandals occur everywhere, in every department. For example, Education, Politics, Business, etc. The world has scandals in every corner. If a reformer tries to identify a problem and tries to reform, people never pay heeds to him. It goes unnoticed by us. But when it is exposed as a scandal, the whole world knows about it and it becomes a biggest talk of the nation or world on how big the scandal is. For example, when the 2G scam occurred in India, it was the biggest talk of the country as it involved the leading politicians in the scam. Even before the problem was brought to light as a scandal many socialists were trying to direct the people to the problems. But people never tried to pay heed to them. Later when it was exposed as a scandal people were more into the problem and the news on every channel for months. This example shows that the Scandals are reliable to draw our attentions on the problems and some problems are best exposed through scandals.
As I stated earlier, people are trying to bring out the problems to the people without the use of any scandals. Social media plays a major role through which many reformer or activists put forward the problem and the people becomes aware of it. It also initiates a positive response from the people that they start to support the activists. One such problem occurred in Tamil Nadu, India where all the people started to protest to ban the PETA organization which tried to stop the famous “Jallikattu” (Bull Fight) event from happening. In order to save their cultural heritage of the game, all the people form Tamil Nadu started to protest. The protest started overnight with lots of people gathering in the Marina Beach in support for their culture. This event started with a single activist and ended with the whole state protesting for their rights. Therefore, this proves that Scandals are not necessarily needed to drag the attention of the people. Even a small message in a social media explaining the importance of the issue can lead to the people’s attention to it.
Thus, I conclude stating that scandals are important in sometimes but not all the times in bringing out the problem to the people. People are matured enough now and even the students are matured enough to handle the problems in how to bring out the situations to the people and drag their attentions. As the famous saying goes “A coin has two sides”, the statement also has two sides with is unique in its own way in bringing out the problems to the people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 350, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ole world knows about it and it becomes a biggest talk of the nation or world on ...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reformer seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reformers'.
Suggestion: many reformers
... media plays a major role through which many reformer or activists put forward the problem an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2624.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 562.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66903914591 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54672772685 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430604982206 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7419816896 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4666666667 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7333333333 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.96666666667 5.21951772744 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 22.0 5.13820224719 428% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220342719312 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643729552423 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054459970757 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142425502657 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656836874849 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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