Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
The issue states that the students are restricted to choose their own field of study by the educational institutes as they believe that the students might not succeed if they don’t have the talent to flourish in that field. This statement might be partially true but not always. An institute should not discover the potential of a student based on their studies. A student may have different inner talents in them which has to be recognized by the educational institution and encourage them instead of discouraging them. I do not state that they do not have the responsibility in shaping the future of the students but they should not dissuade them from pursuing their field of interest.
A student can achieve in a field only if he has the interest to study. If they are made to pursue in the field which are not interested they will end in frustration at some later point which finally leads to their destruction. Many educational institutions try to convince the students at a younger age that they have to pursue only the selected courses, which is not right. In country like India, the talents of the students are given least important. The school or colleges only emphasis on two coursed, either doctor or engineering. Students are finally forced to make a choice between these two courses because of the educational institute and sometime family. Many students have lost their track to their passion and lead an unhappy life. I have seen many students who are interested in sports but are not able to continue their passion due to pressure given by the educational institutes that only academic marks can make a student lead a successful life. These educational institutes fail to see the potential of the students in the sports field. Educational institutes should identify the interest of the students and try to shape them in that field rather than dissuading them.
We can find many great scientists who were all judged by the educational institutes because they were determined to follow their passion. Albert Einstein was also judged by his teachers that he is unfit for school but he turned out be one of the greatest scientist. He postulated many theories to their amazement and remained successful. Even Steve Jobs was a college dropout who managed to start his own company and became successful in building his own empire “Apple”. So we can see that students have to be shaped in their field of interest and they should not be judged in the younger age for what they are likely to become. Judging the students at a younger age is not a right thing to do. They must be encouraged in what they do and that is the right thing for an educational institute to do. Judging a student not only degrades him but also reduces his self - confidence.
Therefore, I conclude saying that the educational institute has every right to indulge in the future of the students but they must try to shape them in the way the students want to become. They must not force them to leave their passion nor try to judge them at a younger age. They can give suggestions to the students but not try to compel them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...atement might be partially true but not always. An institute should not discover the p...
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Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d only if he has the interest to study. If they are made to pursue in the field wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, therefore, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2581.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 542.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76199261993 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68371583528 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40405904059 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5189778345 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2692307692 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88461538462 5.21951772744 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41452039298 0.243740707755 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124762884018 0.0831039109588 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104879037933 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275366657145 0.150359130593 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136157056343 0.0667264976115 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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