Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It seems in this current world of fast communications, where we get to know what is happening at the opposite end of our globe instantly, scandalous news seems to be the only kind that pecks mass public attention. That is understandable of course, human minds were not made to process the news of all seven billion people instantly, so our process of filtering out news leaves us with the most scandalous ones. However, just because a certain subject garner greater attention, it does not necessarily ensure the most convenient outcome for that scenario.
When a subject receives greater attention, it leads to greater number of people being involved to solve it. Which can be a very important aspect in solving a problem. As was the case in the Chernobyll nuclear disaster, where hundreds of people got involved to mediate the damage of nuclear disaster. If the involvement of people were fewer, the situation could have ended up being much more dire than it already was. But at the same time we do not need to look further than the fire in Gulshan, Dhaka, to know that involvement of too many people does not always ensure a favourable result. As the fire piqued too many people’s interest everyone gathered around the building hindering the fire fighters from doing their duty. Also sometimes when a lot of people are involved, it could lead to a motley of opinions which could divert us from the required solution.
When an event reaches the “scandalous” status, people often rush to solve it. While time is of the essence for disaster management scenarios, often times we need to respect a problem and give it sufficient time to solve. All modern video games are guilty of this phenomena. When the GTA V, a very popular video game, came out in 2013 it was filled with bugs in the game. If developers gave sufficient time to solve it such would not have been the case.
And then there are times when human beings are swayed by raw emotions. This is ubiquitous in celebrity scandals, where people thrash a celebrity in social media for doing an activity against the norm. But there are far more disastrous consequences as well. Mob assaults which is the result of too many people, rushing to solve a problem in a method which they deem justified and swayed by emotions are the perfect example where scandals can lead to terrible human consequences.
Scandalous events lead to greater attention to that particular event, and greater attention can sometimes lead to better outcomes. However, for a lot of the cases it becomes inimical for an even-handed solution. So most of the time it is better to take a more sound and sober approach to solving an issue.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...he fire fighters from doing their duty. Also sometimes when a lot of people are invo...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e. All modern video games are guilty of this phenomena. When the GTA V, a very popul...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...13 it was filled with bugs in the game. If developers gave sufficient time to solv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, then, well, while, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83080260304 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71175183182 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516268980477 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6765098007 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.227272727 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9545454545 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112787130532 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032920977553 0.0831039109588 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393772046518 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618155879646 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021636818687 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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