Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Scandal is an event when a person or an organization dupes the system by exploiting some of its logical loopholes and shortcomings. The statement suggests that such incidents are useful because they can help redirect the attention of the public towards important matters. While I mostly agree with the notion, there are a few points to consider against the notion as well. I go into detail about some of these standpoints below.
I believe that we always learn from our mistakes. If we don't make mistakes, we won't be able to progress in our lives. Scandals can be interpreted as the mistakes of our justice department and constitution, and there provide an important means of alleviating some of the pertinent issues. In 2006, there was a major scandal regarding coal manufacturing in India, the main reason behind which was the haphazard management system. There were several complaints by the workers as well as numerous protests about the system. There were rallies organized by the workers about the mismanagement of the funds in the industry, however the common man, so as to say was not bothered by it. The government's position was even more nonchalant, deciding not only to ignore the protests but to shamefully reject the existence of such problems. It only took the infamous coal scam of 2008 for the government as well as the common people to recognize the issues that had been plaguing the organization for so long. It only took another year for the government to implement a complete overhaul of the system and to remove any venal components in its management. Ever since the scandal, the coal industry of India has been flourishing and contributing significantly to the GDP. Had there not been that scandal, the industry would have been stuck in the limbo that had been constructed due to an erroneous system.
Not only can scandals help an organization or a country move forward in a progressive way, it can also bring its citizens together. It is an essential part of human nature that we turn to the people in the same boat as us, metaphorically speaking. Whenever there is a large scale scandal in a country, it affects all of its citizens. This in turn makes the people come together and fight the evil factions of the system, which creates a sense of togetherness as brotherhood in the society. To support this notion, we only need to look at the current struggles in Hong Kong. The state of the city is in turmoil and its citizens are constantly protesting against the scandalous government and police brutality. I'm not commenting on who is right or who is wrong, as it is a very complex matter and warrants an in-depth analysis of its own. But an unintended side-affect of the movement is that it has brought people together. A lot of free train tickets can be seen pasted on the walls of the stations for the protesters to use if they can't afford. There have been reports of several taxi-drivers providing free services to the protesters and to journalists who are brave enough to report the issues. This situation clearly illuminates the point I'm trying to prove.
Yes, the opponents of the notion can argue that the scandals cause a lot of inconvenience for the people as well as has an adverse affect on the money bank of an organization or a country. However, this would simply be a myopic assessment of a much more complicated matter which has many subtle points to consider. While it might cause some problems in the short run, as clear from my examples, it would eventually help improve the functioning of a society or an organization. It will provide essential lessons which would only help make life safer and easier for one and all. Long term benefits can not be sacrificed for avoiding short term difficulties, as such revolutions can help us avoid stagnation and constantly evolving. The lessons from such scandals will also teach us to make relevant changes to the systems to avoid any other incidents in the future as well, without waiting for another scandal to take place.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, regarding, so, well, while, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3337.0 2235.4752809 149% => OK
No of words: 692.0 442.535393258 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82225433526 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12892706869 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79347781926 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 334.0 215.323595506 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482658959538 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 1041.3 704.065955056 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0415597463 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.28125 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.34375 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 5.13820224719 331% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108625251478 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279357418785 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265373956302 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713027672782 0.150359130593 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00972417773911 0.0667264976115 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 165.0 100.480337079 164% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.