schools should be responsbile only for teaching academic skills and not for teaching ethical and social values
The issue of whether or not schools should be responsible for teaching ethical and social values is a contentious one. While each side has its strengths and weaknesses, I believe that schools should be responsible for teaching ethical and social values, because the primary role of school is to prepare students for adult life. Furthermore, schools are best equipped to teach values, and many values can be presented in a neutral, open-ended manner.
First, schools have a clear mandate to prepare students for adult life. In school, students learn how to read, write and perform arithmetic, because these are vital skills for functioning as an adult. Likewise, students study history so that they can learn from the past and participate in society. Values are just as important, since they will ultimately have a significant effect on one’s adult life and on society in general. For example, someone who regards stealing as acceptable will have a much different life frmo someone who regards stealing as unacceptable. Moreover, one’s values regarding stealing will greatly affect society. So, given the importance of values, schools have a responsibility to teach them.
Some may argue that if schools were responsilbe for teaching values, then some teachers would impose their own beliefs on students. This point is flawed, since teachers can always impose thier values regardless of whether or not schools are responsible for teaching values. Moreover, if teaching values became the domain of schools, then a formal curriculum would help prevent teachers from imposing their values, since teachers would then be given clear guidelines regarding the ways in which values must be taught.
In conclusion, schools have an obligation to prepare students for adult life, they are best equipped to teach values, and they can present values in a neutral, all-inclusive manner. For these reasons, schools have a responsibility to teach them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, likewise, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 307.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4006514658 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.751234243 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488599348534 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1199891422 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.533333333 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409003344627 0.243740707755 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169023633028 0.0831039109588 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129782783674 0.0758088955206 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289115473981 0.150359130593 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13046157182 0.0667264976115 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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