Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair
Extracurricular activities help in attaining the overall development of an individual. cutting funding for the same extracurricular activities is not a suitable option rather they should develop a system of allocating the budget at hand more efficiently.
Underdeveloped school buildings will take uncertain time to develop, depending upon the extent of the wear. who knows how much time it could take? cutting all extracurricular activities for the unforeseeable future puts a lot of things at stake, rather they should a systematic approach to spend money more efficiently, for example, if the extracurricular activities spectrum covers a broad range of activities which can’t be funded then the school just opt for those which are very popular among students. Let us say the school has a program for culinary disposed students but if the enrollment in this is very minimal then it makes enough sense to cut the funding. The same goes for sports, in some countries certain sports are more popular than others, the school can cut funding of unpopular sports for some time till the infrastructure is developed. Spending the budget in a frugal manner in extracurricular activities should be given more importance rather than cutting the entire thing.
Providing all-round education to an individual should be of paramount importance for any school, schools can always go for a loan from the government or any other private sector, many private investors are looking for an investment opportunity, though in this case, it is not a traditional way of investing. but the point being made here is education takes priority over money and schools should opt for money from external sources so as not to hamper the education of the student.
All-round development should be given first priority, that being said if the building and infrastructure are in a dismal situation and are actually proving as a hindrance in basic academics then it makes sense to cut off the funding and allocate the same in developing the proper infrastructure. for example, being a mechanical engineer, workshop experience is very important since it is of prime importance, more than any extracurricular activities and if workshop building is not in the required state then it makes sense to develop that building
The priority should be efficient usage of the budget at hands and if the conditions are so bad that they are affecting basic academics then it makes sense to cut the funding from the extracurricular activities
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Cutting
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Suggestion: Cutting
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'activities'' or 'activity's'?
Suggestion: activities'; activity's
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Message: Consider replacing "in a frugal manner" with adverb for "frugal"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cture is developed. Spending the budget in a frugal manner in extracurricular activities should be...
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Suggestion: But
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, look, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19306930693 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10004569411 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477722772277 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.170133982 60.3974514979 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 174.833333333 118.986275619 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6666666667 23.4991977007 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366290480404 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144243811292 0.0831039109588 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683915785554 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206620109006 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793214181174 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.1392134831 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.8420337079 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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