Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
What should a strategy be when faced with balancing the economic development and the environmental protection? Some people advocate that a society should only save endangered species when their extinction is a result of human activities. While this view has its merit, I am at odds with this proposal at large degree. In my opinion, such a policy overlooks the positive consequences of protection and its implementation has the potential to hobble economic and scientific advancement.
To begin with, I understand the logic of the aforementioned recommendation and recognize the costs and resources associated with the environmental protection are significant. Factories are forced to shut down to reduce air and water pollution. Some areas are, thus, prevented from development to reserve animals‘ habitats. Therefore, putting indiscriminate efforts in saving every species is not desirable, which may hurt the general human welfare.
However, the above argument hinges on an unsubstantiated assumption that turns a blind eye to the potential benefits of protecting certain animals and plants. In other words, we, human, do not only have moral responsibility but also economic and technologic causes to do so. First, as we all know, tourism is very profitable, which even becomes a major industry contributing to the national GDP growth in certain countries, such as Thailand and Kenya. As a result, the society should make efforts to save endangered animals, if they can create revenues for that region. The government can build wildlife zoos or natural parks to attract visitors achieving the goal of environmental protection and economic development at the same time.
Second, wildlife, as a whole, is a pool of genes and has inspired a series of technological advancement. In history, birds were the father of aircraft, and the submarine was invented based on fish’s outlook. In the contemporary period, people are extracting effective elements from trees to product anti-cancer medicines. Mammals are also ideal subjects for experiements experiments. In such a circumstance, the society should also assign priority to the environmental protection for the demand for technological innovation.
To summarize, as I have manifested above, it is too precipitous for the author to reach the conclusion that human should only protect certain species when they are threatened by human activities. On the contrary, economic and scientific dynamics also justify such a policy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55905511811 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26165730694 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590551181102 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2367297242 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.9 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05 5.21951772744 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224907668928 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612084232266 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878849096707 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119199204221 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481555929257 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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