Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
It is important for humans to live with diverse species not only because we are living in the same planet with them but also their existence will enrich our knowledge about diverse creatures. However, there are many species that had existed and extinct; many of them are endangered as well. Some of them are endangered because of our activities. We humans have destroyed nature in the past for the development of ourselves. Although we are well awarded compared to out past, we are still making many species in danger. While some might argue that we are only in account with the species that we humans have endangered to extinction, as we do not know much about the natural selection process. However, I contend that we are in account to every species that are in danger of extinction, as we can benefit more from saving them.
First, we have to admit to the fact that we may have not endangered all of species that are in a chance of extinction; there are natural selection process that we cannot control, as we can see from the Darwin’s theory. As Darwin has proved in his books, there are selections in nature; some of species are “naturally” fallen behind while others may evolve and prosper. Moreover, we must admit that we should not do much about this selections that are happening in the nature of naturals. However, as we have resources and ability to save endangered species, we should try to save them from extinction.
Although natural selection is in nature, that does not mean that we should give up and do nothing about them. Those species might have been naturally extinct. However, we can learn from those extinction process and existence of those species; why they are naturally extinct, and what can we learn from not naturally extinct them. There are no such thing as what if in history. However, if we make those potentially endangered species to live longer, exist longer, then there are what ifs in our history of biology, and that diversity will teach us some precious lessons that we could not have learned otherwise. Some may argue that there are not enough resources for every species that are in danger of extinction. That is true. However, we can gain much more benefit from saving them.
Last but not least, the most important fact here is that we cannot clearly divide which species are endangered by human activities. As I have mentioned above, we are living in the same planet, the planet which we do know which has resulted some results. Although many social scientists have tried to analyze which actions has resulted some fact, the rigorous researches has not yet clearly analyzed the real cause for our actions. This would be similar to species that will extinct; we do not clearly know which species are in danger of extinction of human activities. There might be latent cause that are resulted by humans that made such specie in danger of extinction. We have to try our best to save them, if we have done something quite ago that made them extinct.
In conclusion, we have to try as much as possible to save endangered species to exist as we can benefit from living with them, and we can learn many lessons from having them with us. Moreover, we, at this stage, do not know which of our actions have made them to the degree of extinction.
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Essay evaluation report
Your arguments are very close to this sample essay:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-essays/society-should-make-efforts-save…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 576 350
No. of Characters: 2635 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.899 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.575 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.288 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.294 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.299 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Sorry for the simple comments. This essay doesn't have serious issues. Ideas are correct, but the expressions are not outstanding. So we only deliver you to the sample essay because we want you know another way to develop the ideas.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 291, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the species') or simply say ''some species''.
Suggestion: some of the species; some species
... books, there are selections in nature; some of species are 'naturally' fallen behind...
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Line 2, column 441, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... admit that we should not do much about this selections that are happening in the na...
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Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this extinction' or 'those extinctions'?
Suggestion: this extinction; those extinctions
...lly extinct. However, we can learn from those extinction process and existence of those species;...
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Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'things'?
Suggestion: things
...turally extinct them. There are no such thing as what if in history. However, if we m...
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Line 3, column 621, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...ld not have learned otherwise. Some may argue that there are not enough resources for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 13.6137724551 206% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 89.0 28.8173652695 309% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2723.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 576.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72743055556 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51405134431 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.362847222222 0.468620217663 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 870.3 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 4.96107784431 343% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 2.70958083832 443% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8048855258 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.851851852 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2962962963 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160668475131 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701412168681 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464143934352 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116632332427 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483768374782 0.0628817314937 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.32208582834 84% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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