Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
The statement above recommends that some people believe that competitiveness is more important than cooperation for leaders to succeed, while the others recommend that cooperation is the most important trait for a successful leader, especially in today’s world. In my opinion, competitiveness is an innate human characteristic and it is a basic condition for someone to become a leader, but only when it is understood as a support for positive ambitions. However, the history has shown that competitive leaders often did not use it for good achievements and progress of their nations, but rather competitiveness often has resulted in tragedies. Therefore, my believe is in line with modern leadership believes that the pivotal trait of today’s leaders is to be cooperative.
The fact that it is innate is the reason why I think that it is not needed to work on development of this feature, but on its control. there are many examples of the imperators and nations’ leaders who were highly competitive, which resulted in great tragedies for their countries and for whole world in general. For example, Adolf hitler who was a great supported of Pan-Germanism, anti-semitism, anti-communism was so competitive that could not reason with a clear mind. this resulted in Second world war which was a total katastrophy for Germany and for whole world. other example for unreasonable competitiveness in napoleon. From here comes the scientific term napoleon complex. he was very short and from here came his complex which resulted in great aggression. he was the emperor of France and conquestited great part of Europe for one decade. finally, as he wanted to concord whole world, he started towards Russia where his kingdom ended. these examples show that when there is uncontrolled competitiveness without cooperation and with reaching a common ground, soon or later the tragedy is warrantied.
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On the other hand, there are examples of very cooperative leaders. Their success truly helped to their countries and people. For instance, gandhi was the leader of Indians, firstly in south africa, and then in india. gandhi was fighting all his life for human rights by non-violent civil disobedience. this model of protest and fight became an inspiration for whole world. gandhi achievement was end of the British rule in india. Following his model, Nelson mandela, the first democratically elected president of south africa fighted against apartheid. finally, in 1993, with the help from the previous president De Klerk, mandela succeeded. The third example of non-violent civil disobedience was the example of Martin Luther King who fighted against discrimination of African Americans in the USA. these leaders are proof that competition is much greater warranty for success in the world. They are inspiration for most leaders also today.
In conclusion, there are many examples of competitiveness in the world that soon or later resulted in complete unsuccess, literally tragedies. hitler is responsible for 11 million victims of the II world war, among which for 6 million Jews. while on the other side, the leaders who practiced collaboration and cooperation were always successful improving the well-being of the people of their nations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in general, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2778.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 515.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39417475728 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09255595698 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506796116505 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 855.0 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.0472705081 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2142857143 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3928571429 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89285714286 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14463452313 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429563922226 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635699137006 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111221897536 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540411651072 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.