Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The best way to instill leadership in youth is to inculcate in them values like cooperation and respect for their co-workers. This can be achieved if the society starts teaching the youth to not take part in competition among their peers. Instead help their peers in recognising their weaknesses. In a competitive society, the mentality of the youth will be to win at any cost. This is usually more applicable in sporting activities and it is in this field we have seen the participants engaging themselves in unfair and illegal means such as using Performance Enhancing Drugs (PEDs) to get an unfair advantage. This would not be suitable in developing the youth.
A leader should be someone who can guide their employees or peers by respecting their opinions and cooperating with them in coming up with various solutions and not getting into a unhealthy competition. Competition in workplaces can be allowed to a certain extent but shouldn't be encouraged as it would lead to an aversion among the employees. Instead of coming up with a solution together, they would engage themselves in coming up with their own individual solutions and would try to undermine other solution. This would also result in tunnel vision among the youth as they would only be thinking about the solution from their own perspective. For success there should be cooperation among the workers and not competition.
Lets take an example if the company's leader wants to come up with a solution to tackle an issue which his company is facing. He asks the employers of his company to give their opinions about the task at hand. On coming up with some solution if the leader does not encourage or cooperate with the employees and tries to justify his own solution is better (due to him being brought up in a competitve environment, he tends to believe that listening to others is equivalent to admitting defeat) this would discourage his employees to come up with innovative solutions. Infact the next time the employees would just agree with whatever their leader comes up with.
Therefore, the leaders should always include everyone in the decision making process and should not be encouraging a competitive environment. Being competitve may serve purposes for short terms but in the long term there will be discord among the people. Hence it is the job of a leader to put an end to this and encourage cooperation among the employees. Cooperation will not only result in a happy environment but also lead to success in any field. It is always better if the people are on the same page and are ready to support and cooperate with each other and not the other way round.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
... part in competition among their peers. Instead help their peers in recognising their w...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... various solutions and not getting into a unhealthy competition. Competition in w...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... can be allowed to a certain extent but shouldnt be encouraged as it would lead to an av...
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ong the workers and not competition. Lets take an example if the companys leader ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...there will be discord among the people. Hence it is the job of a leader to put an end...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, still, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85619469027 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73209486522 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473451327434 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2568769718 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239486700704 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847151474578 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049907135192 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164449171913 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680293532322 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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