Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Do people with excellent leadership qualities are born with it or do they imbibe within themselves? Most certainly the answer to this question seems straight forward, Leaders are not born but moulded in this world. With that idealogy in mind I moderately disagree with the author of the prompt claming that for leadership in particular fields we need to embedded a sense of co-operation and not competition.
Co-operation and Competition are not exactly two polar ideas. They are both needed for the faster advancement of human kind in this society and one cannot certainly seperate them away. Without Competition there is no motivation for growth and without co-operation there is lesser scope for learning various prespectives of mistakes. To illustrate my views Let us take an example of high school cirriculum of Japan. Until students graduate their highschool they are mandatory to take subjects like, Project Building, team management and individual project. For a student who likes Algebra the most, what does these subject offer to him?. On deep analysis by psycologist understood that these mere mandatory subject offer students to recogonize and develop their co-operation skills by working in a team and building individual projects thus giving them a sense of competition. This methodology of high school education has helped japan to give birth to generation of students which have a potential leadership qualities. Inspiried by their success rate California State Goverment has made similar programs mandatory in their schools as well.
However, it can be easily stated that excessive competition can actually hinder the mere leadership qualities budding process. Competition is a daily meal of the day but when it crosses the boundaries it invites many negative qualities with it like being envy of someone or showing unnecessary egoist attitude. These qualities divert an individual from reaching it's goal that is imbibing leadership qualities. Nobody wants their leader to be egoist, envious. To give an example consider the situtaion of Hitler who put our world in front of death himself. He would have been an excellent leader if he hadn't showed the signs of being superior to any other race or being envious of the wealth and fame of his rivals. With that qualities in a leader we all know where the community lead by him will eventually go.
In conclusion, The best way for a society to prepare for its young people for leadership in various fields is by instilling them a sense of not only of co-opeartion but also of competition, provided the care should be taken that none of these qualities are absorbed in excess and both should reside in perfect balance just like chinese symbol of Yin-Yang
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, still, thus, well, in conclusion, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16930022573 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79618650104 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568848758465 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6006471863 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156738333699 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458198021269 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055237701652 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0966923892823 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651953720183 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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