Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
College students are usually confounded in the beginning about the career they choose to pursue. It takes days, months and year for some students to decide their field of study. The prompt describes two antithetical views of people regarding the path that a high school student must take. I strongly agree with the opinion that focuses the talent and interest of the student while selecting the branch of study in two ways.
Firstly, jobs are ever-changing. There cannot be a particular area which always be at the top for a long period of time. This is all due to the development and change in interest of the people and the condition at that time. For example, during 1960, nuclear engineering was at it suffice. Almost all of the developed as well as some developing countries had a great interest in development of nuclear plants both for energy purposes and for manufacturing of large-scale weapons. During that time, the demand of people having knowledge on nuclear science was excessively high. By 1990 due to several debacles like, explosion of plants in Iran, decreased the viability of nuclear program. A student who had pursued field related to nuclear plant in around 1985 due to the availability of jobs was certainly hampered in later years. So, jobs are capricious and choosing the field of study based on job can become completely be absurd after some time.
Secondly, not all people have the desire to earn more money and, have a debonair lifestyle. Some individual just want innovation in their desired sector and finding of new process as well as upgrading present elements. People become happy only if they are given the environment that they truly want. For example, a well-paid computer engineer who had interest in photography can never be satisfied even if he has better social status. He may think about photos of different natural sites and the new techniques he could use if he was working in his interested field. The person might work as per his requirement in the current office but can never do a piece of work from his heart. In these cases, that high paying job, sophisticated lifestyle is all of less importance to the person.
However, some may argue that in this competitive world the base of the person should match with the requirement of the working space. But, is it not the case we are taking about? If a person is interested in a path, them he will work hard with complete dedication to get selected and succeed in his career. In conclusion, due to these unpredictable change in the nature of job and also for achievement of satisfaction and happiness one must pursue his field of study based on his interest and talent not on the condition of outer world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...a which always be at the top for a long period of time. This is all due to the development and...
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Line 2, column 298, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...r engineering was at it suffice. Almost all of the developed as well as some developing co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2238.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8025751073 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65325970563 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530042918455 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7611607075 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.25 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247755631217 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632081894197 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651266767423 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155268901664 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693247927067 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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