Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning
What does competition for grades do to the students? Does it prove to be inspiring or stressful for students? These questions are quiet debatable in present context. Here, the prompt explicitly asserts that there are two opposing views regarding aforementioned questions: some believing competition has merit for students while other believe that competition does more harm than good. I mostly agree with the first part of the assertion and defend my thesis based on two compelling argument with evidence. Concession is also presented to show that sometimes competition is unfavourable for some students.
Firstly, competition is fundamental part of nature which incorporates all living beings alive. Competition is part of natural selection --the process where healthier and strong beings prevail wherelse weak and fragile one gets extinct.Humans are also part of nature though different from other beings and this rule of nature is also applicable in students life where assiduous and deligient students thrive wherelse weak and inept students fail in the system.
Secondly, in today's contemporary world, competition is very much high in every field. Since job market has been shrunk in almost every part of the world, companies seek for students who stand out among the others. So, grade of student is very much important for the corporate and companies to get astute employee for the company. So, competition to be better than others, in their field of study, helps students to get motivated for better job in their career.
Admittedly, in some cases, grading system and competition prove disadvantageous for student as they may astray away from real learning. They may focus on grades rather than their course of study. It may even bring stress to the students thereby, limiting quality of learning.
In conclusion, the subject matter is moot and there are no easy answers. However, glancing upon juxtaposition of both opposing views, we find that competition for grades ,in most of the cases, prove fruitful for the student while ,in some of the cases, it does more harm than good.
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...the cases, it does more harm than good.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 335.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27462686567 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75011735508 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558208955224 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 76.8023121768 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.941176471 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7058823529 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338588165861 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108754942058 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829106952831 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176544622728 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661803203382 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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