Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed.
Running a government is challenging. Leaders often do things which are not desirable but ethical. Depending upon the gravity of the information a leader should make a choice of disclosing information. I'm against the disclosure of all the information, and I've some facts to support my stand.
State is always facing some kind of national threat, sometimes the situation becomes critical, like the attack of 9/11. It is desirable to know what is happening around us. However, knowing this kind of threats might creat chaos, and whoch further leads to poor resolution. USA had planned attack on Osama Bin Laden, if it was discoled publically then the results might not have been achieved. In adiition to that, some serious information regarding cosmic threats, which goverment might be dealing with in places like 'Area 51' should stay hidden. Although, Everyone is curious to know, but the reality can be haunting. Everyone supports the ethics and scale it as right think to do. Nevertheless, sometimes it is become important to choose survival over ethics. The aircraft carrying the football team of Chile was crashed on Andies, The survivors had to submit to the situation and they ate human flesh. If government disclose this act of canabalism the survivors might have been castigated, instead of awarding them for their struggle of survival.
Although, some decision require surreptitiousness, not everyhting should be withhold. Right to information should be the fundamental right for the citizen. How much the tax is collected, and how it is used should be readily available to the public, so that they can act against the possible corruption threats. The catastrophe, which can be resolved by public support should not be withhold, like announcement of potential heavy rainfall, or tornado, or volcano erruption. The economical changes in market, the price increases in foriegn market, inflation rate should not be withhold for private purposes. Although government usually disclose this kind of information in public, but some political figures are know that beforehand and take some economical advantage of situation. For example, information of sudden change in demand of oil might come to first ministry officer and then public, Like what happened during the demonetization in India, some public fugures already knew that, and had no trouble making arrangements.
In summary, depending upon the nature of the information one should judge the disclosure of it. Threats to national security, public safety and chaos spawning information should stay hidden. The spy missions are really mysterious because, they were hidden and disclosed decades after they are occured. This kind of information should wait for the neutrality in world before disclosed. On the other hand, information related to day to day affairs, economical downfalls, natural disasters should be given publically and especially synchronously, there should not be any bias relaed to who will obtain it first.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...ake a choice of disclosing information. Im against the disclosure of all the infor...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
... disclosure of all the information, and Ive some facts to support my stand. Stat...
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Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rights'?
Suggestion: rights
...one supports the ethics and scale it as right think to do. Nevertheless, sometimes it...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'withheld'?
Suggestion: withheld
...eptitiousness, not everyhting should be withhold. Right to information should be the fun...
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Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
..., or tornado, or volcano erruption. The economical changes in market, the price increases ...
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Line 5, column 711, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
... public, but some political figures are know that beforehand and take some economica...
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Line 7, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nding upon the nature of the information one should judge the disclosure of it. T...
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Line 7, column 426, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'to day'.
Suggestion: to day
... On the other hand, information related to day to day affairs, economical downfalls, natural ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, really, regarding, so, then, for example, in summary, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 470.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35957446809 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88597316422 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56170212766 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.720937216 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8846153846 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0769230769 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57692307692 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242708862993 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641749494764 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550548036229 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143861248141 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770324877126 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.