Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
There has been constant debate whether the government consisting of only a few people of a nation could really enforce democracy. Also, there has been many cases of conflict between politicians and the citizens in various countries because of the unbalance of information. Politicians should withhold some information from the people because some information may include national secretes, and if the people are too informed, the process of policy making may be strongly opposed by certain parties and will be hindered.
First of all, politicians have close access to government secretes which may harm the nation if the information is leaked(divulged) to another country. In this case, if the politicians are mandated to inform citizens, these kinds of top secret information will be easily leaked which will be detrimental to the country. For instance, if politicians are to be forced to give information about trade matters of the country, people may post this kind of information online, which by the way is hard to block. Then, other governments will take advantage of this information and will try to take a higher(advantageous) position while making trade agreements. This example is not only limited to trade but may be applied to other parts of the nation's interaction with other countries such as military, finance, culture etc. However, there is also the danger that these politicians take advantage of these information and try to make money out of it by selling these top secrets to other countries. For example, Donald Trump sold the USA's secret to Russia. Therefore, informing citizens may be highly pernicious to the government and country because of the potential of information leakage although still not totally safe in the politician's hands.
Next, by informing the people, the government might face hard opposition when deciding or making policies. Because people are so enlightened, they may represent more resentment toward the government and blame their policies. For instance, if the government decided to block the crypto-currency market because it is causing the stock market to break down and they inform the citizens before approving the policy, they will possibly face a hard opposition from the people who have invested heavily in crypto-currency. Then even though the government has decided to go through this policy for a good cause, to save the stock market, it will result in hatred toward the government, and people opposing the policy may make protests to hinder the policy making process. Nevertheless, these kinds of protests and the people participating in decision making processes could also have some positive effects such as making the government make more thought out and rigorous policies. All in all, enlightening citizens will hinder the speed of decision making but may lead to more prudent decisions.
In conclusion, giving information to the citizens may lead to information to travel overseas which may lead to other countries benefit, and may cause the approval of a policy to become sluggish. However, by allow citizens to participate in politics, it may also result in a more organized and inclusive policy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 735, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ut may be applied to other parts of the nations interaction with other countries such a...
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Line 3, column 891, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...hat these politicians take advantage of these information and try to make money out of it by sell...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2666.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 505.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27920792079 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91956947058 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453465346535 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1208191987 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.315789474 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5789473684 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.31578947368 5.21951772744 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160637628647 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581002821212 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431676178266 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106009201913 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307845926631 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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