Some people believe that the most effective means of advancing the development of a society is by focusing on the contributions resulting from the goals of each individual. Others believe that goals pertaining to the whole society provide a necessary unifying direction, without which individual contributions are meaningless.”
We live in a society where every individual is unique. These individuals comprise of a society living together in harmony.Every individual tries to contribute as much as he can for either his own welfare or his societies welfare.Keeping this in mind, these individuals must try and develop their goals which would help the society to a much larger extent than himself.I agree with the author to some extent that individualistic goals must provide for a much bigger cause otherwise these goals might prove as a bane rather than a boon.
Firstly, every individual strives to develop himself and inturn develop the society in the coming times.These individuals somehow become eccentric and they think that their goals are above the society. These individual goals can prove to be detrimental to the society.For instance, nuclear energy was built to substitute a better way to provide electricity.Nuclear energy proved to be much more efficient than the arcane ways to provide electricity , but some of these individuals use this kind of energy for destruction of the society. Hirsohima and Nagasaki are the living examples of this scenario.
Secondly,new technologies must prove beneficial to the entire mass of society instead of a particular region. The developed nations have technologies which should be provided to all the developing and third world countries in order to develop humanity.For instance, technologies like internet which provide as a source of information to the entire world are still not reachable to all the places in the world due to high maintenance costs and lack of infrastructure , these technologies should be feasible to all the possible regions.
However,individual goals do provide means to the betterment of the entire society.Some technologies which are founded by some eccentric individuals may prove fruitful to the entire society.This might seem banal at first but might prove to be revolutionary in the near future. For instance,individuals like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs created Windows and Apple respectively .Today the products of these companies are used by almost every individual in the world.Hence some individuals might not seem to care about the impact of their invention on the society but those might help in development of the society eventually.
In conclusion,development of the society is effectively done by both individualistic and unified goals.The intention behind every goal should eventually be positive and not destructional.Society will develop when all the individuals will strive towards the betterment of it, with respect to everything in their power.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46928746929 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.41514646119 2.79657885939 122% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493857493857 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 720.0 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 23.0359550562 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 140.652052953 60.3974514979 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 222.6 118.986275619 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.7 23.4991977007 173% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 5.21951772744 259% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 7.80617977528 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255160898026 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112386751061 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619167142778 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159091655154 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049684904796 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.7 14.1392134831 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 13.96 48.8420337079 29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.3 12.1743820225 175% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.33 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 11.2143820225 161% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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