Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Is the success of whole society more important than the well-being of individuals? This question is fiercely debated by many people. Some people claim that a thriving society is the final goal of its citizens while others assert that well-being of the citizens is the foundation of a country. In my view, these two things are interdependent with each other.
From the view of the big picture, it is obvious to say that the importance of thriving society precedes individuals. After all, forming a society is one of the essential value in human civilization: by cooperating with other people, and sometime sacrifice our own advantages, human can accomplish the tasks that are not possible to be achieved by solitary creatures. In ancient time, for example, people spurned the prejudice and animosity to formed the tribe to fight for the harsh environment by sharing the food and skills with each other, and thrive from the stability they established. In modern society, only by the coordinating power of the government, we can achieve unprecedented goals that are unfathomable before: from building large-scale infrastructure to exploring the outer space. Thus, it is the whole society, not the individuals that advances our civilization.
However, citizens are the essential component of a successful society. In this sense, the happiness and welfare of people is the impetus of thriving society. On one hand, only by satisfying the needs of people, can they accomplish their own responsibilities properly and correctly. To illustrate, humans are made by flesh, we need food, time for respite, proper entertainments, and a sound social welfare system. After these preconditions are satisfied, people can exert their effort to work for their higher goal such as producing product, utilizing the creativity to make our society better. By contrast, if people live in the status of poverty, they are unable to fulfill their basic needs not to mention achieving those “high” purposes.
Furthermore, overly concentrating on the whole society but ignore the well-being of people also results in a range of problems which not a good indicator for a successful society. For example, high working hour may spur the competitiveness of a country since it boost the productivity of a country or a company in a short time; by imposting high tax on people, governments can receive more fund to facilitate the development of infrastructure. Nevertheless, in the long term, high working hour may cause low birth rate and higher health risk, which are detrimental for the whole country. And, high tax, may inflame the malcontent to the government and therefore result in riot or revolution as we can see the stamp duty inflamed the revolution in the American. These are all the ramifications of unconscionably focusing on the success of the society, which doesn’t ensure the long-term success of a country.
In sum, the citizens are the cornerstone of a society, the well-being will directly or indirectly influence the success the society; on the other hand, the thriving of a society is the only way to make ta breakthrough and advancement for the whole human beings. Therefore, we need to balance on both to them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, after all, for example, such as, in my view, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2696.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 521.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17466410749 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08491576671 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499040307102 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 849.6 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8067073122 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.545454545 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6818181818 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.54545454545 5.21951772744 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290932113034 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084445256349 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985572321946 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18327860166 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100612613623 0.0667264976115 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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