Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Regarding formal education, some people believe that it free people’s mind and spirit; others believe it tends to restrain the mind and spirit. Both points of view are reasonable in a way; yet, the former one is more closely aligns with mine. What formal education may restrain is the wild imagination of people; however, it provides the foundation for the mind to think of more practical possibilities. Hence, my view is more closely align with that formal education helps free the mind.
Formal education free our mind and spirit. First, formal education frees us from ignorance. Formal education provides us the knowledge base on which we can think of ways of in order to solve problems and achieve our goals. For example, in order to save a patient, a doctor needs medical knowledge, which he has learned from medical school. Without formal education in medical science, one can have imagined whatever he wants, he will unlikely help with the patients. So, formal education free us from ignorance. In addition, formal education free us from limited resources. At school, we learn various ways of finding deeper and wider range of knowledge that we need. By doing so, we are able to get access to unlimited knowledge, which broadens our horizons and boosts our awareness of indefinite possibilities. Moreover, formal education strengthens our skills of critical thinking. We are guided to think of different ways of approaching the same issue and encouraged to wonder all kinds of possibilities. Therefore, formal education provides the mind with the knowledge base, ways of accessing to more resources and skills of critical thinking. Therefore, formal education free the mind with limitless possibilities, which is aligned with my points of view.
On the other hand, formal education may restrain people’s wild imagination. Surely, if give both a five-year-old and an adult an abstract picture, the child would give you all kinds of possibilities. The young mind is full of all kinds of wild imagination. By contrast, the adult would give you answers based his/her knowledge and experience in real life. The difference is partially caused by the educational system. While educators try to provide all kinds of knowledge and skills, they have to follow the curriculum, educational policies, say, NO Child Left Behind, and all kinds of standard such as Common Core Standards. Due to the policies and standards, students have to pass all kinds of test. Along with the journey of learning and testing, students’ mind may be circumscribed by the practical imaginations and solutions. It is true that the wild imaginations could be inhibited, but formal education provides knowledge that promotes people’s imagination and creativity in a more feasible manner so as to solve all kinds of problems in life.
In conclusion, formal education could hinder the wild imagination of people. Nevertheless, formal education provides the mind with unlimited knowledge which promotes the mind to think freely in a more practical manner. Therefore, both points of view are reasonable in a way; yet, mine is more closely align with that education frees the mind.
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one is more closely aligns with mine.
one is more closely aligning with mine.
Sentence: Both points of view are reasonable in a way; yet, the former one is more closely aligns with mine.
Description: The fragment more closely aligns is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace closely with adjective
Sentence: Hence, my view is more closely align with that formal education helps free the mind.
Description: The word free is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: Refer to free
Sentence: Formal education free our mind and spirit.
Description: The word free is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to free
Sentence: So, formal education free us from ignorance.
Description: The word free is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to free
Sentence: In addition, formal education free us from limited resources.
Description: The word free is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to free
Sentence: Therefore, formal education free the mind with limitless possibilities, which is aligned with my points of view.
Description: The word free is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: Refer to free
Sentence: Surely, if give both a five-year-old and an adult an abstract picture, the child would give you all kinds of possibilities.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to if and give
flaws:
It is not good to discuss the ideas half and half.
suppose A: knowledge, facts...
suppose B: imagination, creative thinking...
the topic is actually asking us to discuss the relations between A and B
if we agree, then we need to argue that there is no conflict between A and B.
1. Without A, B can't applied practically. for example: a child has the idea of flying, but it is only an idea.
2. More A, can create more B. for example: it doesn't mean a PHD guy has less creative thinking than a freshman. Instead, The PHD guys can have better views in one area.
3. Sometimes, more A, may create less B. for example: in a lot of countries there are entrance exams in high school for students going colleges, and students have to memorize a lot of facts, formulas....but this is not true 'purpose of education'. It is in a wrong track.
4. solution: A and B help each other.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 510 350
No. of Characters: 2565 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.752 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.029 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.732 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.586 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.318 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.655 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.476 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.224 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1021, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...nd creativity in a more feasible manner so as to solve all kinds of problems in life. ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'it is true', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.261382799325 0.240241500013 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.128161888702 0.157235817809 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.109612141653 0.0880659088768 124% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0387858347386 0.0497285424764 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.043844856661 0.0444667217837 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114671163575 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0219224283305 0.0406280797675 54% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9283499156 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0252951096121 0.030933414821 82% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0826306913997 0.0997080785238 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0168634064081 0.0249443105267 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0118043844857 0.0148568991511 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3178.0 2732.02544248 116% => OK
No of words: 509.0 452.878318584 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.24361493124 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.37721021611 0.366273622748 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.296660117878 0.280924506359 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.235756385069 0.200843997647 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.174852652259 0.132149295362 132% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9283499156 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 219.290929204 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428290766208 0.48968727796 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.8584377466 55.4138127331 88% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.5517241379 23.380412469 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5797659161 59.4972553346 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.586206897 141.124799967 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5517241379 23.380412469 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.689655172414 0.674092028746 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 47.2177359258 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.888 1.64882698954 115% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.545797676647 0.391690518653 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151806337215 0.123202303941 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.111559468803 0.077325440228 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.477713192634 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.129180122923 0.149214159877 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199688929858 0.161403998019 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954113617064 0.0892212321368 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.407803508348 0.385218514788 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0160108403676 0.0692045440612 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.416541012801 0.275328986314 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844362252597 0.0653680567796 129% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.4325221239 163% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88274336283 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 7.22455752212 221% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.70907079646 258% => OK
Total topic words: 27.0 13.5995575221 199% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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