Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the purpose of education frees the mind and spirit or restrain our minds and spirits. Indisputably, education allows us to explore different fields and find what students excel in. Nevertheless, education requires students to take mandatory courses to graduate and to follow what professors want in their course. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that the purpose of education frees the mind and spirit and instead restrains them.
Firstly, throughout a person’s education career, they are required to take mandatory courses in order to graduate. To illustrate, let us look at the example of science courses. For a student majoring in a language, such as German, science courses are not relevant in their major. Instead of focusing on their majors (keep in mind it is what they are interested in) they will have to divide their time to the science courses. With the lack of freedom of what courses they can choose from, the courses they are less interested in would cause them to focus more on them and forget about their major classes.
Furthermore, professors structure their classes differently and have their own opinions on topics. I had an experience similar to this and caused me to think more like my professor instead of forming my own opinion. In the course I was enrolled in, I had to write essays about different controversial topics. If our opinions were opposite from our professor’s, our grades were lower compared to the ones who aligned with the opinion of the professor. In this case, we were restricted in how we had to think.
Admittedly, education does allow students to explore different fields and does free their mind and spirit. This is true especially when it comes to art majors. In these fields, creativity is a major factor in their success in the field. However, the above argument does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that education frees the mind and spirit.
In conclusion, although in specific areas of study, education does free the mind and spirit; however, in other cases education does the opposite. As long as some measurements are performed, or some areas are involved, education restricts the mind and spirit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...ducation restricts the mind and spirit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, thus, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 370.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1027027027 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78833136819 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505405405405 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1379448627 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.4 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250127413517 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874363112198 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108675087255 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172227192638 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116707186503 0.0667264976115 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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