Some people believe that society should try to save every plant and animal species, despite the expense to humans in effort, time, and financial well-being. Others believe that society need not make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The ecosystem constitutes of all the plant species, animal species and humans living together and being dependent on each other for resources. The inter-dependence of the species describes how tightly coupled the environment is. Removing a single species of plant or animal can cause a ruckus. Hence, it is important to preserve various plant and species to keep a balance in the ecosystem. Despite that, some people believe that society need not make extraordinary efforts, at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species which is simply bigoted thinking.
Humans are known to be the most intelligent and evolved species on the planet. Still, Deforestation, increasing pollution, Hunting etc. are on the rise. Various species such as the dodo got extinct in the previous decade, many of the exotic animal species are hunted for their body parts and are endangered. Many plant species are on the verge of extinction, continuous deforestation has proved to be a gargantuan issue in the fight to preserve nature. Hence, we must take responsibility for our actions and help in preserving the endangered plant and animal species.
An effort was taken to preserve the plant species, by keeping a variety of endangered species together under freezing temperature in bunkers. These are stored safely such that if one of the species become extinct, one can genetically produce the plants to keep control of their population. Also, for animals, various wildlife preservations have been built to protect endangered species such as pandas, tigers etc. This helps to stabilize the animal’s population and keeping a check upon them. Hence, various steps have been taken already but stricter rules need to be in place, stopping the problem at the origin. Each government should ensure that the animal species which are endangered, are protected. Stricter laws on hunting endangered species should be in place. No corporation should be allowed to convert areas with exotic plant or animal species to industrial area. If the government apply these rules, then the population of the endangered species would start rising back to normal levels.
In conclusion, it is important to maintain a balance in the ecosystem, even if it causes pains to the human species. The issue stated that preserving the animal and plant species costs a lot of resources such as money, jobs, time is a valid point but the human species is responsible for creating the issue, hence, we must create a solution for it. “We don’t own the resources; we owe it to our posterity”
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: CONSTITUTES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consists of'?
Suggestion: consists of
The ecosystem constitutes of all the plant species, animal species a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, still, then, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13636363636 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80129647975 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516746411483 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6432289373 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.347826087 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1739130435 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65217391304 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283618202423 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760118915013 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079571077816 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177316185794 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939116794423 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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